WarpShot

Warpshot was running. Royal Guards were chasing him. Ever since he moved to Canterlot, Warpshot loved to sneak into the Royal Palace. Normally when guards came he would teleport away without being seen, but for some reason he couldn't teleport. All he could do was run but he was not going anywhere now. The guards kept getting closer and closer. They grew fangs as they approached him and their armor grew darker by the second. And just as they approached Warpshot...he awoke. That was one crazy dream. Warpshot said to himself. The dark purple unicorn awoke in what appeared to be city streets. He could smell the salt water of the coast. He saw strange floating white crystals lighting some areas of the city. It was still pretty intact. Warpshot realized when he stood up that he had a saddle on. This was not his saddle at all. Inside was a candle, two maps, and a canteen. Looks like his canteen was empty. What a shame. You look at your map, you can hardly see it in the dark but it looks like you are in Fever Coast's Southern City Commons. You would try to light your candle but you know that you only know how to perform levitation and teleportation magic. Guess you need to do it the old fashioned way.

if you don't want to hear negative feedback dont ask for reviews. Also color scheme is a very important factor, if everyone was rainbow shit, jet black, or just shitty colors in general, they would all be mary sues. Maybe you should see everypony else's reviews and see that the OC pages are reviewed for EVERYONE. You gotta learn to accept negative feedback when you post, this is the internet. Edit: Also might I add, you mean to say WEAK and PLAIN not week and plane.

Banned for being a grammar Nazi

7/10 Not really a fan of sleep deprived Twilight but its good artwork and I guess it makes sense since she's always busy.

I'd say Luster Song sounds pretty good but maybe Lena Lust? Yeah I think i like the idea for Lena Lust much better

Hey I have an OC I'd like you to draw. Could you draw him? His name is Warpshot and the only pic I have of him yet is in my signature. Could you draw him being startled by something, making him shoot out a magic bolt? If not anything with teleportation is fine.

Heh, I've ever been reviewed before so why not? http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/warpshot-r3644 He's adventurous and a little bit innocent but is brave when he has to be.

Glad to hear everything turned out good for you! For me though, I just watch it in private. No one in my family knows im a brony and I dont feel like its something I HAVE to tell my friends or family its not like its a big deal, we just watch a TV show and contribute to a fandom.

Thanks do you have any suggested roleplays for when I start up?

I salute you military brony. Glad to see we have people like you protecting our country.

This is WarpShot here, I'm new. I'm hoping to get into rps and maybe make some oc art.