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I did not know that a Cutie Mark image was a requirement. I can, if necessary, provide a link within 5 days. Is that a requirement?

There is!!!! I didn’t know I needed to provide a cutie mark image. Editing issues too.

@Heart Star Very. This OOC is now dead, and I have a feeling that our new one is toast as well. If you're still interested in this, you can probably message Buck Testa, but the response will probably be the same as mine. Sorry for the misconception.

So, here's the deal. Every time I try to edit one of my characters, the edit button does not show up. It may have to do with that he is pending second approval, but there are a few things I need to edit to get approved and I can't. Anypony got anything on this?

I’m having some editing issues. The button to edit ain’t showin’ up. I’ll do it as soon as I can.

Alright, I’m good!!!!!!

I absolutely appreciate your help! Thanks! Also my computer is deciding to be mostly shitfaced right now. Sorry. I’ll get that up soon though!!!! Edit: My tech is working again. I appreciate your help. Check it out! I also left your edits blue as you made them so that they’re easy to identify, although your writing style is quite memorable!!

Well, MLPForums, it’s been a good run. I do want to say that this is a welcoming, strong, non-toxic internet community that has avoided the taint of thousands of users by encouraging kind behavior. Thank you to the moderators. I don’t even know the amount of time you all work, but I’ve appreciated it. I can imagine that one of you will rocket in here to move my topic to another forum, my apologies but I didn’t know where to put this. Thanks to all of my friends for being a haven of kindness here, and of jokes too. Don’t worry, I’m not leaving. I could never bear to leave this place. I am gonna be gone for a while, though. Maybe a week. Maybe four months. I don’t really know. We really do embody the pastel ponies that we love so much, and we cherish their core values of kindness, generosity, laughter, honesty, loyalty, and, of course, magic. This forum, more than any other place or experience, has taught me to find the silver lining in things and to have a positive outlook. I will see you all later. And as Pathfinder would say: “Cheers!”

Thank you for taking time to review my character! I’ve implemented your changes as wished (you possess great skill in writing). I apologize for the “pleasure garden” issue. If you have ever read Siddhartha by Herman Hess, you would know what it is. In ancient India, a pleasure garden was just that - a garden, literally, for the pleasure of the plants within. Being a Buddhist, it was a simple way to pay some tribute. However, I do understand the quite erotic echoes of the words, and have happily removed it. Divorce happened to me when I was about 8, and this is another way of paying tribute. Again, removed with ease. However, the dead dad is hard to eliminate, since it kinda forces me to rewrite the entire rest, or almost. Leavin’ that unless you really are against that. I mean, we have Applejack’s dead parents, right? Also, used “perished” to soften the word use. I write dark stories as a hobby, and sometimes they leak into this world of pastel ponies. I await your response with great anticipation! UPDATE: I’m having some editing issues right now. Trust that I am trying my damndest and I will attempt to hash this out in the next few days.

@Buck Testa I’m just busy b/c of the end of the school year. I’ll get right back on it as soon as I can.

In my opinion, the hooves are the worst of your problems. Work on the rectangular shape, and make them more natural or don’t include any hoof lines at all. Other than that, I love it! You seem pretty talented, especially since eyes are hard to do.

London shrugged. “Your security protocols have a once-every-two-weeks glitch - a hole of sorts. Easily, I filtered through cloaking software. Wasn’t counting on Jarvis being there though. I mean, my code was rock-solid!” He powered down his Terminus and continued speaking. “Regardless, the flawed system plus the easy infiltration of a security profile made entry easy but exit difficult.” He then made a confused face. ”How did you know where to find me, Mr. Stark, and why?”

I will absolutely edit them out. However, they are not “rocket boots” but instead just have a bouncing function. Basically, he can jump like a kangaroo.

@Buck Testa As accommodating as you have been, I see your distress at two Stark clones. I can differentiate further (my latest attempt at that was with Jackson, although in retrospect, she may have simulated Pepper). Let me know if you need anything of that sort.

“I like rusty spoons” Yeah. I watched Salad Fingers for the first time today.

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I would say so, yeah. Unless you negotiate something (really hard with a corporate entity) you would probably would

London didn’t know what to think. He was speechless. Iron Man, Tony Stark, his hero, had just come to his rescue, and he was exultant. He was surprised but reacted quickly. Doing as Stark said, he pulled out his Terminus and set it to low charge. “This should be non-lethal, but no promises. I have tried to monitor the electrode pulses in the past, but stifling it has been difficult.” With that, he fired off a bolt of yellow energy, frying the chest of a bodyguard. The energy burned through the man’s suit, body armor, and part of his flesh, leaving a one-inch hole of blackened skin and muscle in the him. London laughed. “Yeah, thought so.”

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London built up courage inside him. One wrong thing said, and he was toast, and he and Forson both knew it. He hated Forson, but his job paid the bills, and he needed to pay them. “Give me four days. I can clean up my trail and hopefully anonymously slow down Stark and his annoying legal team.” He sighed. He knew he had one shot at this. “Please, just let me off. I can do better. I can do anything you need me to do. Give me another shot.” With that, as he stood up from his chair, he placed a three-millimeter-thick and 1 centimeter-wide microphone under the edge of the desk. Within seconds, it detected the environment and camouflaged. Even if Forson or his goons looked under the desk, all they would see would be flat wood. Might as well listen in, London thought.

@Buck Testa London size up the situation. Two dozen bodyguards, plus Forson: he didn’t stand a chance. He could only hope to convince Forson to let him off. “I was careful, Dr. Forson. I laid in dozens of security profiles and injected cloaking data packets into Stark’s server, but Jarvis was able to bull through all of that. I just wanted to see the authentic Stark and his reaction. We all know that Stark and every other rich person, including you, put on a mask every time you do a bit of PR. I wanted to see a real person, not “Iron Man”.” He cleared his throat for effect and continued. “I also wanted to get copies of the data on the Iron Man suit so that I could get it to you.” He whispered under his breath so that no one could hear (@Skylord Nexus) “Or sell it to the highest bidder.” London looked at Forson again. “I can get back in there with more security and get that data if you want! We both know I’m the best techhead you know and one of the best, period. Give me five days. You will have the data by then. I swear by it.”

It. Is. Awesome! I love it so much, thank you! Also it is now my profile picture!

Could you do my Diamond? Also, a lightsaber with a purple blade would be much appreciated if you can!