HyperRapid 2 July 1, 2014 Share July 1, 2014 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YQ8qrJ6jssM 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Courageous Thunder Dash 7,825 July 1, 2014 Share July 1, 2014 It's an okay piece. However, I think you limited yourself a little too much here. All you're doing is just going from A# minor to A minor with some minor third piano riffs. It seems a little too plain. You could've started the begining out in a filter and then slowly sweep it out to a more open and driving beat. I also feel that it doesn't have that "iron" feel to it. An "iron" feel would be a bit more industrious and heavy sounding with deep bass kicks and rumbles. Here, I kinda feel that it is just a regular electronic beat. The percussion is too repetative and needs more variance. You have a simple 1 and 2 and 3 and 4 and beat with kick and semi-open high-hats. Try adding some fill-ins and divide your music into phrases and measures. This way, you will be able to easily find places where you can add transitions and fill-ins, which are very important in electronic music. Overall, I kinda feel that this piece needs to be reworked, as it's a little simple. Maybe round the cadence since you have: A#m - Am You could do A#m - Am - F#dim7 - F7 3/10 Please don't take offense in this, as I'm a musician of 15 years experience. I can tutor you in some theory if you'd like. And welcome to MLP Forums! Hope you enjoy your stay here! 2 Youtube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCeWg-TtBRMfqketa1ELyKGg Soundcloud: https://soundcloud.com/menelik-david-kenneth-cannady 2nd SoundCloud: https://soundcloud.com/thunder-dash-alternative/tracks Pony.fm: https://pony.fm/thunder-dash Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HyperRapid 2 July 1, 2014 Author Share July 1, 2014 hahah no I didn't take offence or anything, your criticism, as well any other is highly appreciated Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Courageous Thunder Dash 7,825 July 1, 2014 Share July 1, 2014 hahah no I didn't take offence or anything, your criticism, as well any other is highly appreciated Oh okay. Would you like me to tutor you in some music theory and stuff? Youtube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCeWg-TtBRMfqketa1ELyKGg Soundcloud: https://soundcloud.com/menelik-david-kenneth-cannady 2nd SoundCloud: https://soundcloud.com/thunder-dash-alternative/tracks Pony.fm: https://pony.fm/thunder-dash Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HyperRapid 2 July 1, 2014 Author Share July 1, 2014 Thank you for the offer, but I'm affraid I'll have to pass... I'm not very social Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Courageous Thunder Dash 7,825 July 1, 2014 Share July 1, 2014 Thank you for the offer, but I'm affraid I'll have to pass... I'm not very social We can do it through personal messaging here on the site. Youtube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCeWg-TtBRMfqketa1ELyKGg Soundcloud: https://soundcloud.com/menelik-david-kenneth-cannady 2nd SoundCloud: https://soundcloud.com/thunder-dash-alternative/tracks Pony.fm: https://pony.fm/thunder-dash Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HyperRapid 2 July 1, 2014 Author Share July 1, 2014 Allright then, if you have the time, sure Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Courageous Thunder Dash 7,825 July 1, 2014 Share July 1, 2014 @@HyperRapid, Okies, sending the PM now. Youtube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCeWg-TtBRMfqketa1ELyKGg Soundcloud: https://soundcloud.com/menelik-david-kenneth-cannady 2nd SoundCloud: https://soundcloud.com/thunder-dash-alternative/tracks Pony.fm: https://pony.fm/thunder-dash Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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