Dash-N - Good Ol' Days (feat. Jackle App) [Redo]

[Dash-N 13]

Now that I'm back and making pony music once again, I thought I'd start off by re-doing some of my crappy old ones before moving onto new songs! So here it is, a new version of my rap-rewrite of Good Ol' Days by The Living Tombstone!

You can listen/download this song here: https://dash-n.bandcamp.com/album/good-ol-days-single

And a clean version if you prefer here: https://dash-n.bandcamp.com/album/good-ol-days-single-2

This song here, as I stated, is a rap-rewrite of Good Ol' Days by The Living Tombstone. It is literally about the good old days of the brony fandom, and I added in some personal touches to the lyrics, because being in the fandom back then meant a lot to me, as it does now. I hope you all like!

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,824]

Ok

I remember reviewing this track a while ago. 

As far as the lyrics, hate to break it to you, but they're cheesy. You told too much instead of showing how the brony music scene has really impacted you. Also, I wouldn't use the f-word, as it throws your mood off. I'd use the slang "bucking" instead, which can add on to the impact of the song. Using rhetorical language can really make your raps shine. I know people like to rhyme in rap these days, but often times, rhyming can end up being cheesy, if not done right. 

All in all, decent track, but you still need to work on showing versus telling in your lyrics.