MLP and Warriors Crossover I'm Working on. [Beginning]

[Hundsi 1]

I'm working on a MLP and Warriors crossover. I need suggestions, and constructive criticism.

Don't talk about the format, it got messed up as I copied it over.

 

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Taurfilly had just woken up. He was still half asleep, he wasn’t aware of anything that was going on around him, but he knew one thing. He was hungry. He quietly trotted over to the fresh food area that the whole clan ate from, and picked out an orange. He did his best not to disturb the other ponies that were still asleep. Just as he thought he pulled it off, another one of his clanmates exited the shelter he slept in. He remember the light-blue colored pony, and quickly recalled her name was Ostfilly.

    

 

“Surprised i’m not the only one up...” muttered Taurfilly, just loud enough for Ostfilly to understand what he said.

    

 

“Well, if you weren’t so disruptive, maybe you would be the only one up at hours like this!” Ostfilly shouted. It wasn’t that loud, but Taurfilly knew that being even the slightest bit loud wasn’t good at all, as clanmates were trying to get sleep.

    

 

Taurfilly wasn’t even that suprised at all, because he knew that Ostfilly being grumpy wasn’t very uncommon. Even the whole clan knew that. He ignored that thought, because another one came to him. One of the pony queens foals was going to be pronounced a filly today. Taurfilly started getting pretty excited, because the leader of the clan at the time, Awdstar, told Taurfilly that he could show the foal around, because he wouldn’t be familiar with the clan life, this would be his first bit of it. He decided to go to bed, because nopony was going to be up for awhile, and he couldn’t wait to teach the foal the ways of the clan.

 

“Well, it’s time.” Ostfilly said as she nudged Taurfilly. Taurfilly had been excited for the moment he woke up, as he knew what was going to happen when he did. He jolted right up in excitement, and walked outside. Awdstar was sitting on top of the gathering point, signaling for the clan to gather around.

 

“May everypony gather around for a special announcement, a naming ceremony.” Awdstar spoke, in his brave voice, glancing down at all the ponies gathering below him.

 

“A pony has grown out off it foal past, as he is too big for the nursery. He will become a filly today. I pronounce this pony, Scholtfoal, to now be called by the name of Scholtfilly.” Awdstar continued. His eyes hovered over Taurfilly for what seemed like a second, knowing that he will be the one showing this pony around the camp, and the way of clan life.

 

After the announcement ended, Taurfilly met up with Scholtfilly and told him that he would be showing him around the clan. They both seemed excited, especially Scholtfilly, as this would be the beginning of his clan life.

Edited February 8, 2013 by 404Pony