Eclipse Rising....i would appreciate your opinion

[Guest]

Ahhh,...hello, this is actually the first time i've ever done a...err... "special" song,..like for nightmare night and stuff...yay....i have achieved nothing -.-,...well anyway here's the song, it's about...you guessed it...nightmare moon...oooo...so original -.-,...well anyway

link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AJP9KlxoFnY

genre: Orchestral, ambient,..something...

 

 

 

Disclaimer: Any opinion is appreciated, be it negative, positive or downright insulting,...

 

thank you, for taking the time and listening to this trainwreck of a song...

 

goodbye

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,825]

It's a pretty simple piece. 

 

Could've developed it more. It kinda felt the same all the way though, which can sometimes bore your audience. 

 

The number one thing to work on here is variance. Variance is what makes music music. Without it, no one would want to listen to music. 

 

Also, the drums came in all of a sudden. It's like you had a 1 second transition into them. Plus they were simple. Ambient music has only a little bit of percussion, preferably only reverse cymbals and maybe a light cymbal crash here and there. 

 

This is all from a 14 year experienced musician. Hope it helps. If you need any further advice, you can always PM me. 

[Guest]

It's a pretty simple piece. 

 

Could've developed it more. It kinda felt the same all the way though, which can sometimes bore your audience. 

 

The number one thing to work on here is variance. Variance is what makes music music. Without it, no one would want to listen to music. 

 

Also, the drums came in all of a sudden. It's like you had a 1 second transition into them. Plus they were simple. Ambient music has only a little bit of percussion, preferably only reverse cymbals and maybe a light cymbal crash here and there. 

 

This is all from a 14 year experienced musician. Hope it helps. If you need any further advice, you can always PM me. 

Ah damn,...failed again at making a song,..ahh well nvm,...variance,..yes, ah i see the drums, note to self...never use these kinds of drums again,...thank you for the advice and thank you for even listening throught this...well...travesty of a song

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,825]

Ah damn,...failed again at making a song,..ahh well nvm,...variance,..yes, ah i see the drums, note to self...never use these kinds of drums again,...thank you for the advice and thank you for even listening throught this...well...travesty of a song

It's not really a travesty...well...it is a song that needs A LOT of work. But don't worry, you'll get better over time. Try listening to other artists who use that genre and see what they do. As I said before, most ambient songs contain only a little bit of percussion, mostly reverse cymbals and the like. Would you like me to coach you in music composition to improve your skills?

[Guest]

It's not really a travesty...well...it is a song that needs A LOT of work. But don't worry, you'll get better over time. Try listening to other artists who use that genre and see what they do. As I said before, most ambient songs contain only a little bit of percussion, mostly reverse cymbals and the like. Would you like me to coach you in music composition to improve your skills?

You would do that? Ofcourse, i'd be glad to recieve some coaching , i would like to improve my music making, it would be awesome if i could learn from you.

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,825]

You would do that? Ofcourse, i'd be glad to recieve some coaching , i would like to improve my music making, it would be awesome if i could learn from you.

Ok. We can PM from here on. Be ready, because I'm gonna give it my all in teaching you about composition. We can cover some good stuff today.