Despair (Sombra song) Hopefully it does not sound horrible -.-

[Guest]

Hello, after a long time of not doing anything. and having no motivation i made something. Basically the premise of this song is Sombra facing charges for all he's done. Basically his execution day. Well that was kind of the idea. Truth be told, i'm feeling really down, so honestly this song isnt very good, im not sure if it can even be called a song. I've given up on the possibility of ever doing a good sounding song, so i just put shit together and hope it smells of roses.

Anyways here it is: 

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,826]

Alright, first and foremost, I don't think those sound effects go with the mood of the song. It seems to take it away. Dripping cave sounds would fit with this piece instead of chains, doors, creaks and whips. The piano is bit bland. Dial in some chorus in it and maybe extrapolate on the melody. You've got a good start, but it needs varience, and more development. You could've also added some soft reverberated upper strings, such as violins. Better yet, you could've used pizzicato (plucked) violins in a slow rhythmic feel. 

 

All in all, it's a good start but it needs a lot more development

 

5.5/10

 

Don't give up! Remember, I'm here if you need help.  

[Guest]

Alright, first and foremost, I don't think those sound effects go with the mood of the song. It seems to take it away. Dripping cave sounds would fit with this piece instead of chains, doors, creaks and whips. The piano is bit bland. Dial in some chorus in it and maybe extrapolate on the melody. You've got a good start, but it needs varience, and more development. You could've also added some soft reverberated upper strings, such as violins. Better yet, you could've used pizzicato (plucked) violins in a slow rhythmic feel. 

 

All in all, it's a good start but it needs a lot more development

 

5.5/10

 

Don't give up! Remember, I'm here if you need help.  

Thanks for the tips and thanks for the offer. Now that i think about it, yeah should have added cave fx. 

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,826]

Thanks for the tips and thanks for the offer. Now that i think about it, yeah should have added cave fx. 

Yeah, preferably ones with one reverberated drops and howling sounds. I can help you refurbish this piece if you'd like.