IncompetentBrony

So, I've recently started writing some MLP fanfics. I hadn't thought of sharing them with anyone, but, one of my friends read a couple, and told me they were pretty good. He then went on to tell me that I should share it with the rest of the community. So, here I am! I didn't know where to post it, except from the place I have lurked for a while. An excerpt from something I have written is contained below. I want to know what you guys think of it, and if I should continue to post. Thanks!