DragonBane96

So i'm working on a fanfic and i was wondering if anyone would be kind enough to send their thoughts. there will be a portion of it on here but i need to give an explanation. It's the story of two brothers from another universe who get transported to Equestria after they died in their dimension. Drayga is the older brother and is a paladin and kind of a jokester, he is kind hearted but holds back anything around family in a conversation. The Younger brother is Dragoon and he is...well simply a jackhole. he is odd because he is very introverted but will sometimes show a lighter side of himself. They go through the same storyline as the show (skipping some episodes because they it's more adventurous) and they show each other a brotherly bond not shown near the beginning. That's as blunt as i could put it so here is the interesting portion i want people to give their thoughts on. After hours of motionlessness, Drayga groggily awoke. He was hung upside down from shackles on a stone wall. He examined the room. It was a poorly lit room made of stone and housed several wooden devices. Unable to identify what they were, he looked to his left and right to see the other six were still asleep, but hung from the wall. He noticed that they were hung right side up though. “Well it’s the wakeup call…” A voice called out. The others awoke and looked around, “What the…”They said. Rarity began to say, “This is not how a lady should be treated…” Before any other pony said anything, a shape appeared in the room. It was a humanoid shape with what appeared as a longcoat made of shadows but had shadows emanating off of its body. The eyes opened on the foreign creature in the center of the room, revealing pure red eyes, filled with malice. “My… the mighty have fallen, haven’t we Drayga?” It asked, it’s voice warped and cruel. He recognized everything about the creature in front of him, “DARK…you’re alive? But how? We banished your being to the eternal rift..” “Ah yes…My imprisonment… Well when you foolishly challenged Aditra without removing the seals, I monitored your soul traveling here as soon as you died…” DARK then grinned maliciously, “Knowing revenge was at hand, I followed your spirit and escaped through your pure heart.” Twilight then piped up, “Where is NightMare Moon?” “Oh that simple ragdoll? I’ll discard of her when I’m done with you seven down here…” Turning to Drayga, “Starting with the holy warrior here…” He moved towards a small roll cart and pulled it up, near Drayga. He shuffled on the tray upon it and then gasped, “Oh-ho…what have we here?” He asked playfully, pulling something from the tray. Rainbow Dash started to thrash about, “What are you going to do with that!” she demanded. He ignored her and turned towards Drayga, holding a knife made of a black material, “Can you guess what this is?” he waved the knife’s bladed edge in front of Drayga’s nose, almost cutting him. Drayga scowled when he recognized the material. DARK laughed, “ah this form is so much fun…You look too cute to be taken for the famous Paladin, whose slain countless abominations and the such…But that’s beside the point. This dagger is made of obsidian, a material that you don’t want in your bloodstream…” He grinned wickedly again and moved forward almost in kicking distance of Drayga, “And to a paladin, it’s deadly to be even barely cut by it…” AppleJack piped in here, “What do ya mean by that?” “Well country girl, if I cut you with this, you’ll be poisoned but will most likely recover… But a light wound has that effect on a Paladin, including one of his rank…”, DARK explained, pointing at Drayga’s upside down body. “A deep cut would kill him after days of agony…” They then saw his intentions and the girls gasped, “You’re planning to kill him?” “As he tried with me, but I can’t be truly killed, only imprisoned…” He then readied the knife and said, “Enjoy the show girls, for this will be you shortly.” Before he moved Drayga asked, “Why am I upside down?” DARK giggled with excitement, “So in your dying breath, you taste your own blood” He then plunged the dagger into Drayga’s gut, causing everypony to scream, some looking away, as DARK wrenched it, twisting the knife, causing Drayga to scream in agony. Dark then got up and laughed to himself, leaving the room. Drayga faded quickly but saw that the others were trying to get the dagger out but Rarity and Twilight’s magic couldn’t touch the dagger. He felt his blood flow down his chest and begin to flow over his face. Before he faded, he saw Rainbow break off her shackles and fly to his body, trying to get him down…

Hey, BladeMane here (Don't know how to change the registered name) I'm trying to promote my first fanfic. so far progress has been slow and i want to spread the word. Visit http://hyruknight.wix.com/knightsdomain if your interested. The story is about two brothers from another dimension who get teleported to equestria after their untimely demise. the story will be mature, (Not adult aka not a clopfic) and it will follow the tv show with a few in between segments

First off welcome and secondly this is a tough world and people hate what they don't understand. You need to find the friend that will stick by u anywhere cause I had the same problem. Just release ponydom and find those that'll stay. Other than that, just ignore those that hate on u for ponies. "Live is worth living for there is always something better in life, but we always should enjoy what is unique about ourselves" Drayga Hyru

So I'm currently under process of a fan-fix and it will be the story of two of my characters from the book I'm writing, Drayga and Dragoon. The story will be on how different the show would be if they were added to it and if it was mature (not "Adult"aka not a clip fic.) and I planned on having a "ask the characters segment after every chapter aka after every episode so i was wondering if people had questions or if they want me to incorporate any references. There will be the in between show shenanigans.

See this is what i mean. We bronies can support those with problems. This is one of the reasons that i became one. Thanks again for being there

So at my household, i'm very tired of what happens due to the fact that im the "Quiet" one and i dont defend myself as much as i should. Everyone uses me as a "Punching bag" but wheres mine? No where. My Brother (Brony as well) is the only one that probably respects me but even then that barely happens until i help him. And when i mess something up, i'm all ways compared to someone in the family. I don't remember when i last had them say "try harder" or "we'll help you". IIt's all ways "when i was in your position..." and all that. I've had my fair share of ..."those" thoughts and almost acted on them numerously but it's the things like MLP and this communty that keep me here today. I really respect the people here that don't judge. Thanks.

ello and welcome and im new too. welcome to the herd

Well don't worry, people should accept you for who you are and never bother you for it. if they do their jealousof how awsome you are

If anyone has questions about Minecraft, Ask me questions also i am wondering on how to make a server

Fantastic. im truthfully not a true brony yet but when my DVR starts working easier imma start watchin the show

You know I hear alot off different things about us bronies and you know what I say?? I say stay your self and never change. If your a hidden brony dont fear!!!!! Embrace the fact you show your a better person than any guy who decides to shoot you down for what you like. if they say your gay you should say im not gay and why would you want me to be. The whole fact everybody else will bully you for that is their jealous that you embrace your inner self. I hope everyone reads this and keeps these words in yourself "be yourself and never worry"

so i tried to reply to the minecraft questions and it said it was locked, how do i reply to those?

Hello, im new to the whole MLP thing but ill get used to it. Im currently a Sonic the hedgehog fan so if anyone shares that, brohoof to you.