Strawberry Tart

Oh my God I am so so so so so sorry it took me so long! I've had this art ready to be scanned in (yes I got a scanner finally!) for ages but I kept forgetting and I'm SO sorry! But here it is. I decided to draw your OC as a horse, too, just a thing I was trying out at the time. I really hope you like it....Erm...Sorry again. 3

So this is my first time trying to upload with a scanner (and for some reason it doesn't work on tumblr. Any ideas why?) Please critique it, but keep in mind this: I do not draw hands. Hands are my enemy. So don't yell at me for not drawing them. Also I don't want to color it. Here's the drawing:

I live in Illinois with my mom, stepdad, stepsister, and brother. Every other weekend, I spend the weekend at my dad's (like right now). Here, I'm with my dad, stepmom, brother, half-brother, and half-sister. Both half-siblings are adorable since brother is 3 and sister is 3 months. My dad has a big, spacious, two-story house in a not-too-pretty-not-too-ugly neighborhood. My mom has a one-floor, cozier (but more expensive) house in the most beautiful but most confusing to navigate neighborhood (we also have a gigantic backyard). I know what I want to be when I grow up; unfortunately, so does my mother, and we have very different opinions. I believe a job should be something I find fun; she believes a job should be something you like well enough, that earns you an acceptable amount of money. I want to open a bakery; she wants me to become an engineer, doctor, biologist, etc. Not to mention my grandma (who lives all the way in Poland) who actually thinks I want to be a biologist or a pharmacist. My stepsister is my age (well, half a year older - she turned 15 in October and I turn 15 in April), and she's nice most of the time, but kind of "keep-your-hands-off-my-stuff-this-is-mine-that-is-mine-too" (she also likes to give me opinions on how I lead my life: when I shower, how I shower, what I like to wear, what kind of wedding I want and that ruffly dresses do not work with beach weddings, etc.) sometimes; my brother is 10 and is the most annoying being on earth, 'nuff said; my half-brother is 3 and likes to be loud and obnoxious but I can't ever be mad at him because he's too cute; and my half-sister is adorable, but doesn't do much because she's 3 months old. So yeah, that's my family and my life in general. :3

~Chaotic Luna~'s avatar. Cutest. Thing. Ever. I'm in love with the avatar. Not the user. The avatar. I don't have anything for funniest or coolest.

It all depends. This week I had finals so I tried to go to bed earlier than usual (key word: tried. the earliest I could was 9:30 PM) At my mom's (divorced parents), I have a bedtime, so I'm in bed by 10:30 -.- Even on weekends. At my dad's, I don't, so I go to sleep whenever I like. On Friday I had finals so I was in bed at 10:30 PM, but last night I was not tired at all so I went to bed around 11:30-12:00 PM.

Actually, you do have the correct proportions. The only thing I'd say would be, maybe make the neck thicker and the hair a little less messy. I actually love your art! :3

Before I start critiquing, can I just say that I think what you did is really creative?! You've created your own Mane 6, and you've given them each a name and personality! Way to go~ However there are some things wrong with this (you knew it was coming). I'm guessing her name is Dawn Minuet or something similar, but she looks like she's standing behind the group, excluded. You've not made her big enough. It's a bit messy, too, like you said. And that makes me see only 5/6 expressions, which brings me to my next point. Every singly pony is sticking out her/his tongue. Come on. Couldn't you have given them a little variety? That, and they're all standing in the same position. I have never seen the real Mane Six stand like that, and even if they did, I'm sure they would've had different face expressions. The only one that I see that has a slightly different face expression is Sunset. So give variety! A person does not like to see picture after picture of the same emotion and same position. Now onto the compliments. You've made every hairstyle different, and you've made most of them wear clothes. That's variety. I like it. It gives me something slightly different to look at each time! Not to mention the proportions are right. Yeah, so, I'd like to see this cleaner, maybe? And wouldn't it look cool shaded!

OH MY GOD DERPY. Okay, well, anyway. The art is really cute Especially the scarf. But there's a couple things I'd like to point out, so if it's okay with you, here goes. The general proportions seem correct, but are actually a bit off. The head and torso are fine, so are the back legs. But the front legs are too long. I can see how you got them wrong - bent legs are the hardest - but be careful with them. The only other thing wrong with the proportions is the wing. The eye could be better, because the line with which you drew the outline is a bit wobbly. (Another thing: it's not really wrong, but if you ask me, the scarf is too short!) I like how you shaded the drawing. Not too 3D, so it still had the cartoony feel, but just enough so that it doesn't look completely fake. Good job! The tail and mane are perfect, no work needed there. I just wish you'd added a cloud or something, because right now the drawing is a little...boring. Keep drawing!

Hey, this is really cool? Mind if I critique? The first one if completely fine...until you get to the torso and legs. You've made the torso much too small, then probably made the legs based on that, right? So it makes the legs look short, too. So, I'd say make the torso longer and thicker, and then base the legs off of that, and they should look fine. The tail seems a bit small, too. I like the work you did with the armour. He's well protected! It's detailed. See, if you hadn't made the armour detailed, it would have seen stiff and hard to move in. Armour has to have chinks, otherwise the knight can't move, so good job on that. If you shaded the drawing, it would look even better! In the second drawing, the legs and torso are better - in fact the torso is almost perfect - but you've made the legs too short. Simply making them longer would fix that (...duh.) I'm kind of confused about the multi-colored stripe on his chin. Is it a beard? His tail is a bit too straight, too. Look to the above drawing. In this one, his tail is rounded in the places it should be. I do like the shape of his face a lot. I don't know what you're doing with that, but keep doing it! I also love the style of his mane. Really cool! And his tail is the correct size! (Yay!) In this drawing, I believe, his face expression has more personality than in the drawing above it. I like face expression, but it's hard to do, because you really have to play with the eyes and mouth correctly to get the expression you want. Okay, well, that's all, and keep drawing!

That is a really good idea. It's sad nopony else but ~Lawful Pegasister~ has commented on the idea..

I've a question about this whole tulpa thing. A while ago I started then stopped, now I plan on starting again, but with a different character. I'm wondering: after a while, like 10 hours, what if I started reading books to her? In my head? Would it change anything? I don't know why I would want to read books to her. It's just a random question.

Oh goodness. That's a scary, scary pony. But I like him! He seems like the type that Chrysalis would want on her team, but then he would turn out to actually be good and not want to work with her. Anyway, the style you used is really nice. I like that you actually added a background (most people don't). Oracle himself looks very cool, like he hasn't slept in days or something...and the speaking bubble is so detailed that I can almost imagine what his voice would sound like! However, I think the bottoms of the legs are much too big (but maybe that's just your style, I don't know). His front right leg seems to be thick everywhere, not just the bottom, and I doubt you meant for it to look like that. Um, the tail is a bit too bushy, too. Though, again, you probably meant that... Anyway, really nice job, and I hope you keep drawing art because you're really good!

This is really good. Did you use a source? There's not much wrong with this, except that maybe the front legs are too short. I would also say maybe color the ponies, or at least their eyes, because non-colored eyes are....well, just imagine if your eyes were all white except a couple of lines here and there....yeah. Scootaloo's hair looks a bit small on her, too. But that's all. I'd really like seeing this colored~! (Yes, I know you have no drawing tools. But as soon as you get some...^-^)

Oh then I'm sorry! Galaxy and star then, even better! :3 Anyways, good job and I hope I did go as easy on you as I meant....(meaning, I didn't hurt your feelings did I?)

Glad that the melancholy/lonely part is what you wanted, and the not-your-typical-unicorn thing you've got going on is awesome! Groggy is more mule like :3 the design comes from old English unicorns. Groggy has a beard when a tad older too, but I guess maybe I need to change that to having the beard around at all stages of life (that’s another confusing aspect now that I think about it) umm I will try and get the values better next time, thank you ^-^ yha his horn can be a bit hard at times, its meant to be ivory and shade on ivory tents to look more muted and kind of yellowed and high lights tend to not really effect ivory (unless it is glossed with something). Due to this going over board is kind of easy to do so I was too scared of going overboard with it so that instead, it didn’t get the tender love and care it needed v-v As for the neck that’s kind of funny that you say to not be afraid to make it thicker XD cuz I had it thicker but then was worried that it looked wrong so a chickened out and made it thinner. I will stick more to what I had originally next time and see if that works more ^-^ “Besides that, Groggy looks like he's sitting on hair, because his mane is the same color as the shadow under him. Changing the color of either one would fix that.” It is hair. It’s trimmed more straightly than originally (where it’s scruffy from never being brushed) but it is hair. Old English unicorns often have feathering behind their legs, and that is where the design is based on. And apart from that yha Groggy is sitting on air as there was no plan for a background. “The face expression and colors emphasize sadness and loneliness to me” yes! That is what I wanted ^-^ yay. As for the cutie mark, I intend it to be a lantern. Groggy carries a lantern around, it’s meant to be the lantern from Amnesia but I need to get better at drawing lanterns v.v It’s meant to be more of a symbolic cutie mark and I’m working on making the short story for when Groggy received it when walking home.

God you're good at art. And I know you said go easy on them - I will - but critiques are always helpful to an artist, because they let the artist know what they're doing wrong. So I'm just going to point out a couple of things I don't like on the last one, because it seems like it needs critique. So. Last one. Sun and Moon, correct? Very beautiful. The sparkles are a nice touch, because they make the ponies seem god-like, if that's what you were going for. Sun is perfectly fine, except I can't seem to find her other wing....Now, Moon needs a teensy bit of work. First of all, you pillow shaded him. Pillow shading is only necessary when there is a light source very close up, and in front of you. Not good in a picture like this. Second of all, his back left leg is too thin at the top - it will be just fine if you make it thicker. The last thing I'm noticing is that Moon looks feminine and masculine at the same time. (Sorry...) I'm questioning myself on saying it's a he, because although he doesn't have eyelashes, that's the only thing that makes him not look like a mare. Unless he is actually a she, in which case it's fine. Oh, gosh, was I too mean? I'm sorry! This is really good art, and I'd actually give it a 9/10! Everyone, and I mean everyone, has things they need to work on in their art. You're not the only one! There are dozens of pieces that are worse than yours, and not many that are better. Keep going!

The colored art is really good by fan-art standards. I'd give it an 8/10, and I'll tell you why. The thing about him that most catches my eye is the horn. Everything is shaded and beautiful...except the horn. But, since it's small, I can imagine it would be hard to shade it without going overboard (so be careful). The neck looks a bit thin, too - if you made it any thinner poor Groggy wouldn't be able to keep his head up. So don't be afraid to make that a bit thicker. Besides that, Groggy looks like he's sitting on hair, because his mane is the same color as the shadow under him. Changing the color of either one would fix that. Yeah, except for that, there's nothing really wrong with it. I like your style, and the way you changed the "typical pony" image and made his tail different. The face expression and colors emphasize sadness and loneliness to me, whether that's a good thing and you meant that, or if you want him to be a rather happier pony, is up to you. The detail is cool; I like the freckles especially. Keep going, and I hope you come up with a background, personality, and cutie mark for him!

When I read your motto, I thought, "drugs". x3 But nice motto; I live by it most of the time, too. I tend to judge people by their covers though.

Are you loco in the coco? Pretty sure everyone here would want to go to Equestria! (Silly). I would, at least! Especially Canterlot~

I like it, but it's a bit too fuzzy for my taste. Especially the background. I can't tell what's what. Also, the neck is too thick, and RD's wings are too 'spiky'. They look like they can poke someone's eye out (round the tips off and they should be fine). Also, the eyes are at too great of an angle, and I'm not sure if you meant to have this but she doesn't have a mouth. Speaking of other things I'm not sure you wanted, the lighting looks like something is exploding behind her, because it's lighting up her features in a rather unnatural way. But I do like a lot of things. First off, I like the way you positioned her on the cloud - it makes the cloud look fluffy, yet stable. Oh, and the cutie mark has a lot of detail (I like when people put detail in cutie marks). Her ears and wings are the correct size. And her mane and tail have very vibrant, lush colours. Good job on that. The "cartoony" feel you added to it is nice: the little question mark, the cloud with the scribbles, etc....The lines are very crisp and clean, too. Directs my attention right to Dashie! :3 I'd give you a 7/10. Not bad, but not anywhere near perfect, either.

I HAVE THE BEST HISTORY TEACHER EVER. He has this sarcastic sense of humour and he tells us funny stories. Here's one (I'm going to quote it): "Have you ever had someone in your class that thinks they're funny, but they're not, and everyone in the class is thinking 'shut the hell up!' when they talk? A couple years ago I had a girl like that in my class. And one time I was explaining something, and at the end I said, 'Any questions?' So this girl raises her hand and says, 'Yeah. If you were a unicorn, what do you think you'd look like?' Now there was this kid that sat in the back of the room, and he never spoke. Ever. Shyest kid I've ever met. But now this kid says, 'Um...I think I'd be white...with like, a flowy mane...." And the kid next to him is like 'Oh my God,' and the one id is trying to explain himself, like, 'No, no I didn't mean it like that....' The shy kid never spoke one word in my class after that."

I bake and plan to open a bakery when I'm older (but no, mother wants me to become an engineer or pharmacist -.-) Recently I baked amazing honeybell muffins (a honeybell is a cross between an orange and a tangerine and is only available in January). I put honey on top because they were originally cupcakes but we didn't have frosting or powdered sugar so I couldn't even make frosting. The honey made them 20% yummier. Not giving away the recipe. (Edit: Oh, by the way, I kind of created the recipe. I started with a vanilla cupcake one I found on the internet.) I also sing. I'm in choir and am quite good if I do say so myself Oh, and I draw, but I don't take art class or anything. I just draw on my notes in school. I have a couple of my drawings on deviantart and the Fan Art section of these forums...

*Always, and I mean always, talk to random strangers you find in the forest. *If you are on a flying carpet miles above the city where the air is cold and will dry your eyes out faster than you can say "Blink"....Do not by any circumstances close your eyes. *Things needed to solve problems: Love Magic Logic and problem-solving skills <--Haha, no.

"Smile! A second spent frowning is a second wasted." -Me. "Life has no meaning and never will have a meaning." -Me. "Every thing you do is selfish." -It's not a direct quote and more of a philosophy, but it's by Abraham Lincoln. "Some people say they need sugar to make lemonade out of lemons. I say, 'If you don't have the sugar, create it." -Hey what do you know, it's by me again. I also found one on the internet: "Being straight is okay. Being lesbian is okay. Being gay is okay. Being bisexual is okay. Being transgender is okay. You know what's not okay? Wearing Crocs."

I drink tea, hot chocolate, or carrot juice. Mostly tea though. Even in the fall and spring (but in the summer I drink water or carrot juice).