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Crescendo Star


Love Doctor Blaze
  • No Not Cast Young Adult

    Crescendo is higher, and has a stronger muscle build, then most stallions. He has a yellow coat, and an orange mane that has a blue streaks in it, his mane is a bit messy, but it suits his apperance. He has ice blue eyes, and he always wears an orange bow tie

    male Unicorn A burning star. It represents his talent in helping someone. Or to make it sound better, to be the 'star that lights up the way' Or to be more blunt, he is a morale booster

    Crescendo Star always wears a friendly smile, and has a positive atmosphere about him. He is a 'no one bosses me around' stallion, so he might have problems listening to other ponies. Crescendo is probably one of the most honest ponies in Equestria, which is sometimes a great thing, and sometimes a bad thing when he cannot avoid hurting a pony's feelings. Crescendo is also somepony who will try to help you out with things he knows about. If it's something he doesn't know anything about, then he will usually say: "I don't have the guidance you seek".

     

    Crescendo is also a pretty smart and creative pony even though he may not look like it with his goofy demeanour, and he is always up for a talk. His greatest downfall is however his lag of self forgiveness. Crscendo can't handle making mistakes, so when he makes a mistake, he fixes it ASAP

    Likes: Snobby and arrogant ponies, making mistakes, violence and bullies

    Crescendo Star was born in Canterlot, to his father Carmen Star and his mother Bella Star. His father was a famous singer and poet while his mother was a model. Crescendo grew up in a wealthy family. As a foal, he always wanted to learn how to play the piano. So his father decided to teach him, with the aid of a professional pianist. It didn't take long before Crescendo became good at the piano. In fact, he was so good that he became the lead piano player in the Jr Canterlot Orchestra. While playing there he first saw Octavia, who would become his first crush, but unfortunately Crescendo lacked the confidence to approach her at the time.

     

    Crescendo was so good at playing the piano that his dad expected that to be his cutie mark, but that was not to be the case. He started at a private school when he was old enough. He was not really popular, nor was he bullied, but he had quite a few friends because of his positive attitude. He got his cutie mark when he was a foal. Crescendo became tired of watching the bullies do despicable things to a filly in his class, like hitting her and breaking her personal things, and so one day he helped her out, he stood up for her while she was being bullied, which led to him getting hurt, and ever since the incident he has always been there to cheer her up, and to offer her guidance.

     

    When he was slightly older, Crescendo joined a martial arts club, both because of his fascination with the art and because he wanted to better protect his friend. He really enjoyed Karate, so as a teenager, Crescendo was a black belt. His intense training changed him in a many ways. He gained a lot more self control and stamina, and he got to help out the filly but at the same time lost the ability to handle failure due his harsh trainer who punished him severely for even a single mistake, and because he himself had never been forgiving of mistakes.

     

    Crescendo went on to study psychology. As an Adult. Crescendo began to work as a trainer at a new club, which was far better then the last. He has given a lot of fillies and colts confidence and motivation, because of his gift for raising his students' morale. About 2 hears later, Crescendo moved to Ponyville, where he became a psychologist at Ponyville's hospital. His martial arts however did not fit in Ponyville, a relatively peaceful town, so he built a cabin in the everfree to train his skills. He also has a piano in his house, that he ocasionly plays so that he'll not get bad at playing the piano. He is also the best piano player in ponyville, which means that he plays at all the events in ponyville. At present, Crescendo lives a peaceful life in Ponyville

    I have used latin names. Here is a translation just in case you need it! :)
    Carmen= song, poem
    Bellus=Beautifull, charming

     

    I have changed Bellus to Bella because Bellus sounded more masculine :)

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Hello Blaze :)

 

Crescendo is very cute, but he will need some editing before he can be accepted.

 

  • Exact ages are not allowed in this section, and each use of them in your application must be removed. Your character can be referred to as a young stallion in the “age” section.

  • The personality section for an EqE character must be at least two paragraphs, meaning that you will need to add a paragraph to Crescendo’s personality.

  • Your pony’s name is misspelled several times in the personality section, and is at one point referred to as a “person” instead of a pony.

  • No previous cast character connections are allowed in this section, so your pony can’t have known Octavia prior to roleplaying out meeting her in this section. He can have seen her performing and look up to her or have a crush on her based on that, but the two cannot actually have met.

  • Now that we’ve cleared things up with your other character, the note about it in the “other” section can be removed.

  • Overall, this application should be proofread, as I noticed many errors in grammar and punctuation, to the point where I at times had some trouble understanding what you were trying to say.

Take care of these things, and Crescendo will be much closer to being accepted :)

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Crescendo looks much improved! There’s just a couple more things to be fixed up, then he’ll be good to go! Firstly, I see that you still use some exact ages in your backstory. All of these will need to be replaced with more vague age descriptors, such as “foal” and “adolescent”. Second, the end of his backstory leaves me with a couple of questions that should be answered. What is Crescendo doing for work now that he lives in Ponyville, and how does his piano playing fit into his life now? Answer these, and Crescendo should be ready for approval ;)

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Crescendo looks much improved! There’s just a couple more things to be fixed up, then he’ll be good to go! Firstly, I see that you still use some exact ages in your backstory. All of these will need to be replaced with more vague age descriptors, such as “foal” and “adolescent”. Second, the end of his backstory leaves me with a couple of questions that should be answered. What is Crescendo doing for work now that he lives in Ponyville, and how does his piano playing fit into his life now? Answer these, and Crescendo should be ready for approval ;)[/size]

 

It's fixed

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Thank you for fixing those up. After another review, I did find a few more points to be touched up or fleshed out, but this should be the last time I say that ;)

 

  • After some consideration, the description of Octavia as a “love interest” in the “likes” section seems a bit too familiar for somepony that Crescendo has never met. I would refer to her as a “crush” to avoid making it seem like he knows this pony.

  • The story of how Crescendo got his cutie mark is pretty vague in its current state, more or less just saying that he got it by helping out a classmate who was being bullied. How did he help her, and what did that teach him that led to him realizing his gift as a morale booster?

  • I really like that Crescendo has a variety of interests, but for a pony with a musical term for a name music doesn’t seem to be a very big part of his life. That’s not to say that it has to be his whole life, or even his profession, but it seems like he should do more than just play the piano for fun sometimes, even if all he does is give lessons to foals in addition to his regular job.
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Thank you for fixing those up. After another review, I did find a few more points to be touched up or fleshed out, but this should be the last time I say that ;)[/size]

 


  • After some consideration, the description of Octavia as a “love interest” in the “likes” section seems a bit too familiar for somepony that Crescendo has never met. I would refer to her as a “crush” to avoid making it seem like he knows this pony.
     

  • The story of how Crescendo got his cutie mark is pretty vague in its current state, more or less just saying that he got it by helping out a classmate who was being bullied. How did he help her, and what did that teach him that led to him realizing his gift as a morale booster?
     
  • I really like that Crescendo has a variety of interests, but for a pony with a musical term for a name music doesn’t seem to be a very big part of his life. That’s not to say that it has to be his whole life, or even his profession, but it seems like he should do more than just play the piano for fun sometimes, even if all he does is give lessons to foals in addition to his regular job.

 

Alright i believe i have fixed the problems. :)

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Hi again! I'm going to have to move Crescendo out of Second Approval for now, as some changes made to the system have caused your character's age and WiP status to be altered so that they are incorrect. Sorry for the inconvenience, but as soon as you take care of these I will put him back into second approval. Thanks :)

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Hi again! I'm going to have to move Crescendo out of Second Approval for now, as some changes made to the system have caused your character's age and WiP status to be altered so that they are incorrect. Sorry for the inconvenience, but as soon as you take care of these I will put him back into second approval. Thanks :)

 

Alright he is fixed again. :)

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