Looking for someone to look over a script draft

[Varian Dusk 23]

I am in the process of recording a Theorycraft video on the technology level of equestria, and I have the first draft of the script finished. 

 

I am looking for some folks who wouldn't mind giving it a look and providing some decent remarks, criticisms, or ideas. 

 

If you are interested, drop me a message, and I'll be sure to credit you in the video.