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I'm currently working on a fanfic about an alternate ending for A Canterlot wedding where Twilight lashes out on her brother, friends, and mentor for abandoning her at the wedding reception. Problem is, I've been having a hard time coming up with anything write to start it off. Anyone have any advice for what I could write?

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How about you start writing about what happened in the episode just before you make your changes. Write pretty much after The Queen is defeated and everyone gets their baring.


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How about you start writing about what happened in the episode just before you make your changes. Write pretty much after The Queen is defeated and everyone gets their baring.

 

Once I made a good portion of it i can PM it to you so you can tell me what you think, if you like.

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If you're going to write an "alternate universe" story, start with a quick recap of what's going on before you add your touches. At that point, you should write about how you feel should have happened.


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Well here's the first draft of the intro so far. For those who want to see, the password is SmokeRise10. Let me know what corrections you feel I could make and what else could possibly be added.

 

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/257084/broken-trust

 

As previous people have said, introduce the setting with great detail. In my ongoing fanfic, the intro to the situation is something like 5 paragraph long. Also, the story looks fine till now.


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As previous people have said, introduce the setting with great detail. In my ongoing fanfic, the intro to the situation is something like 5 paragraph long. Also, the story looks fine till now.

 

 

So basically you're saying that I just need to add some more background? If so then what else could I possibly add in? And that last sentence is meant to tell the present scene.

 

And btw, this isn't the entire chapter, I'm still gonna write way more in this one.

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So basically you're saying that I just need to add some more background? If so then what else could I possibly add in? And that last sentence is meant to tell the present scene.

 

And btw, this isn't the entire chapter, I'm still gonna write way more in this one.

 

Well if you're introducing an completely alternate timeline like in my fanfic, describing with great detail is critical. For a small story like this with an already known recent past can have a much smaller intro.


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Well if you're introducing an completely alternate timeline like in my fanfic, describing with great detail is critical. For a small story like this with an already known recent past can have a much smaller intro.

 

So basically what you're saying is my intro is already spot on? Then I can just get on with the actual story. It's gonna take longer for me to work on it though cause of my work schedule.

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It works as a good summery of what happened, but can I suggest that you give hints that Twilight feels angry and betrayed. Thus far you make it clear that everyone is blameless in what happened.

 

How about you do the summery from Twilight's point of view. Again, I'm only suggesting that you give hints and mild forshadowing.


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So basically what you're saying is my intro is already spot on? Then I can just get on with the actual story. It's gonna take longer for me to work on it though cause of my work schedule.

 

It works as a good summery of what happened, but can I suggest that you give hints that Twilight feels angry and betrayed. Thus far you make it clear that everyone is blameless in what happened.

 

How about you do the summery from Twilight's point of view. Again, I'm only suggesting that you give hints and mild forshadowing.

 

As Midnight said, give us a feeling Twilight is upset to make the intro really spot on. Maybe tell the story part time form a 3rd person "god" narrator and another part in italics with what's happening in Twilight's mind.

 

Example:

 

"Hey Twilight, mighty fine of ya helpin' us get rid of dem changelings!" said Applejack. "We really couldn't have done it without ya and your suspicion about that Cadence!"

 

Well why didn't you stand with me earlier when I had those suspicions? Why did you leave me behind and then try to make it sound like you always stood by me?

 

Stuff like that, with Twi going paranoid and doubting about friendship during the story.

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Also, what do you think I could say of how everyone is trying to get the wedding all organized again?

I really don't have any idea for this. Just sum up the events and present the present events.


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Actually, I know exactly what to put in now. The hard part should be out of the way. I'll let you know when I'd like to hear your thoughts on the rest of the chapter.

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