Plonkett 345 April 5, 2015 Share April 5, 2015 I'm currently working on a fanfic about an alternate ending for A Canterlot wedding where Twilight lashes out on her brother, friends, and mentor for abandoning her at the wedding reception. Problem is, I've been having a hard time coming up with anything write to start it off. Anyone have any advice for what I could write? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Midnight Seeker 302 April 5, 2015 Share April 5, 2015 How about you start writing about what happened in the episode just before you make your changes. Write pretty much after The Queen is defeated and everyone gets their baring. Avatar of OC by the lovely Skullgal56 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Plonkett 345 April 5, 2015 Author Share April 5, 2015 How about you start writing about what happened in the episode just before you make your changes. Write pretty much after The Queen is defeated and everyone gets their baring. Once I made a good portion of it i can PM it to you so you can tell me what you think, if you like. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yoshi89 5,293 April 5, 2015 Share April 5, 2015 If you're going to write an "alternate universe" story, start with a quick recap of what's going on before you add your touches. At that point, you should write about how you feel should have happened. ˙ʎpoqʎuɐ ƃuᴉlooɟ ʇou ǝɹ,noʎ 'sᴉɥʇ pɐǝɹ uɐɔ noʎ ɟI Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Midnight Seeker 302 April 6, 2015 Share April 6, 2015 Once I made a good portion of it i can PM it to you so you can tell me what you think, if you like. Sure, I'll give it a look and let you know what I think. Avatar of OC by the lovely Skullgal56 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Plonkett 345 April 11, 2015 Author Share April 11, 2015 Well here's the first draft of the intro so far. For those who want to see, the password is SmokeRise10. Let me know what corrections you feel I could make and what else could possibly be added. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/257084/broken-trust Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yisetab28 89 April 12, 2015 Share April 12, 2015 Well here's the first draft of the intro so far. For those who want to see, the password is SmokeRise10. Let me know what corrections you feel I could make and what else could possibly be added. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/257084/broken-trust As previous people have said, introduce the setting with great detail. In my ongoing fanfic, the intro to the situation is something like 5 paragraph long. Also, the story looks fine till now. DRAW PONIES AND WRITE FANFICS FOR MOTHERLAND Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Plonkett 345 April 12, 2015 Author Share April 12, 2015 (edited) As previous people have said, introduce the setting with great detail. In my ongoing fanfic, the intro to the situation is something like 5 paragraph long. Also, the story looks fine till now. So basically you're saying that I just need to add some more background? If so then what else could I possibly add in? And that last sentence is meant to tell the present scene. And btw, this isn't the entire chapter, I'm still gonna write way more in this one. Edited April 12, 2015 by vgmaster9 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yisetab28 89 April 12, 2015 Share April 12, 2015 So basically you're saying that I just need to add some more background? If so then what else could I possibly add in? And that last sentence is meant to tell the present scene. And btw, this isn't the entire chapter, I'm still gonna write way more in this one. Well if you're introducing an completely alternate timeline like in my fanfic, describing with great detail is critical. For a small story like this with an already known recent past can have a much smaller intro. DRAW PONIES AND WRITE FANFICS FOR MOTHERLAND Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Plonkett 345 April 13, 2015 Author Share April 13, 2015 (edited) Well if you're introducing an completely alternate timeline like in my fanfic, describing with great detail is critical. For a small story like this with an already known recent past can have a much smaller intro. So basically what you're saying is my intro is already spot on? Then I can just get on with the actual story. It's gonna take longer for me to work on it though cause of my work schedule. Edited April 13, 2015 by vgmaster9 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Midnight Seeker 302 April 13, 2015 Share April 13, 2015 It works as a good summery of what happened, but can I suggest that you give hints that Twilight feels angry and betrayed. Thus far you make it clear that everyone is blameless in what happened. How about you do the summery from Twilight's point of view. Again, I'm only suggesting that you give hints and mild forshadowing. Avatar of OC by the lovely Skullgal56 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yisetab28 89 April 13, 2015 Share April 13, 2015 (edited) So basically what you're saying is my intro is already spot on? Then I can just get on with the actual story. It's gonna take longer for me to work on it though cause of my work schedule. It works as a good summery of what happened, but can I suggest that you give hints that Twilight feels angry and betrayed. Thus far you make it clear that everyone is blameless in what happened. How about you do the summery from Twilight's point of view. Again, I'm only suggesting that you give hints and mild forshadowing. As Midnight said, give us a feeling Twilight is upset to make the intro really spot on. Maybe tell the story part time form a 3rd person "god" narrator and another part in italics with what's happening in Twilight's mind. Example: "Hey Twilight, mighty fine of ya helpin' us get rid of dem changelings!" said Applejack. "We really couldn't have done it without ya and your suspicion about that Cadence!" Well why didn't you stand with me earlier when I had those suspicions? Why did you leave me behind and then try to make it sound like you always stood by me? Stuff like that, with Twi going paranoid and doubting about friendship during the story. Edited April 13, 2015 by Blitzkrieg 1 DRAW PONIES AND WRITE FANFICS FOR MOTHERLAND Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Plonkett 345 April 14, 2015 Author Share April 14, 2015 Oh I certainly got something in mind, I just need to find the right time to really get it thought through. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Plonkett 345 April 18, 2015 Author Share April 18, 2015 Also, what do you think I could say of how everyone is trying to get the wedding all organized again? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yisetab28 89 April 18, 2015 Share April 18, 2015 Also, what do you think I could say of how everyone is trying to get the wedding all organized again? I really don't have any idea for this. Just sum up the events and present the present events. DRAW PONIES AND WRITE FANFICS FOR MOTHERLAND Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Plonkett 345 April 18, 2015 Author Share April 18, 2015 (edited) Actually, I know exactly what to put in now. The hard part should be out of the way. I'll let you know when I'd like to hear your thoughts on the rest of the chapter. Edited April 18, 2015 by vgmaster9 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Plonkett 345 May 12, 2015 Author Share May 12, 2015 (edited) I've already added more to it (but not much). Feedback would be greatly appreciated!. Edited May 12, 2015 by vgmaster9 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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