Feedback for my fic's intro

[yisetab28 89]

Twenty-five years a go, disaster struck Equestria. It wasn't a long, agonizing one that would last many years. Believe me, if it took years, months or even weeks, it would have been a lot less damaging than it was. Instead, it happened in one day. Nopony had time to adjust himself, to learn to live in such a radically changed world. Nopony saw it coming. Nopony.

Most of my brothers and sisters in arms weren't there when it happened, so luckily for them, they didn't need to adapt to a new lifestyle like most of us needed to. They never knew the jubilation of getting their cutie mark, but neither did I. They didn't see the hundred of magnificent cities in the sky, controlling the weather and giving us some sense of security by letting us know what tomorrow would be. They never knew the convenience of lifting your stuff with your the magic of your horn instead of having to walk huge distances carrying it all on your back.

Most of us didn't get a lot of information at first from the actual source of the disaster, but rumors started surfacing very fast once the disaster happened. Some said it was Discord, but no one ever even saw him after it. Some said it was the fault of King Sombra, but we all knew that he was long dead. It looked like everyone had their own story of why we lost magic, but you would never know who to trust.

At first, we thought this was the worst that was going to happen. We couldn't imagine worse than losing such a big part of our lives and culture... But we were wrong. Magic was only the first part. When it crumbled, everything that depended on it soon fell with it too. Droughts, famines, every possible manner of disaster was unleashed upon the once friendly land we called home. Many of my friends died during those dark days. But darker ones were still to come...

 

So, just wrote this quickly for a prologue to my fic. Is the style good? Anything to change?

[Idris 241]

Reads okay to me for a first draft.