AppleDash Fanfic

[AppleDashFan 36]

Hey all, I am going to post this on FimFiction.net but was wondering if it was good or if it needs work. i wanted a first oppinion... please tell me what u think

 

The Days To Remember chap 1.rtf

[Spring Storm 276]

It's pretty good so far. A couple grammatical errors, but nothing too major. You're off to a strong start and I'd love to read more as the story progresses.

Edited December 8, 2012 by Spring Storm

[Jammo 986]

I've had my fill of lesbian horses..

I know hetero shipping is considered icky and taboo but I wish it was used more.

Decent read but I've seen a lot of this. But to be fair I could never write a shipfic as decent as this. Wouldn't know where to start.

Edited December 8, 2012 by Jammo

[AppleDashFan 36]

Thanks Spring, ill try to fix the grammer. this is my first try at any type of story, so i greatly appreciate the praise.

Jammo i know theres alot of this, and repetativeness can get very annoying and/or boring but ive always liked it. but also from you i greatly appreciate the praise considering the mood you have for this ^.^

i have a few questions. Do you all think that the name for it is good? or it need a better name maybe? plus im having a bit of trouble with the description of it.... also were should i pick it up next chapter to make it... interesting? if anyone has any ideas id greatly appreciate the help and/or suggestions to the topic.