In the Meadow I See (Poem Critques Welcome)

[twilight24 323]

In the meadow I see

 

A peaceful sea of grass

 

Flowers wavering gently

 

In the hushing calmness

 

Of the breeze that plays with my hair

 

I sit and wonder about life

 

Of past mistakes, of what I lived through

 

 

My journey was never easy

 

Wrought with sorrow, but with triumph too

 

I lived to see another day

 

And in the meadow I see

 

What could have been missed

 

 

In the meadow I see

 

With eyes clearly

 

A little path least traveled

 

But great adventures it can hold

 

 

In the meadow I see

 

God's hand in everything

 

And how we're all apart of this great plan 

 

I laugh and smile

 

At the musing of a young girl

 

Sitting under the wide green tree

 

Because in the meadow I see

 

Plenty of love, space, and harmony

 

In the meadow I will forever be

 

 

[chaucer345 0]

The language of this was beautiful, but like most poetry I'm pretty confused about the message. It seemed to start out carpe-diem themed, but ended divine themed. What was your intention?

Edited June 30, 2013 by chaucer345