Nomadic 210 August 6, 2013 Share August 6, 2013 (edited) Ok so I just made a new OC, and would like as many opinions as possible on the character. I realize she is still unfinished, but much of the minor details can wait. In addition, I'm interested in peoples opinion on my stylistic choice I made for the backstory. I wrote it in the first person because I was bored, and it sounded fun. Please any criticism is appreciated, and I hope you enjoy it. Wander Lust: http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/wander-lust-r4123 Edited August 6, 2013 by Nomadic OC Info: Monkshood, the Apothecary, Denarius, the Gambler (In Progress) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Iron Wing 237 August 6, 2013 Share August 6, 2013 Hmm... i like the name of your OC, also because of the German reference. What i think is missing is a better developed cutie mark story, also i miss a bit the appearance describtion. Then i have several questions: - Does he have friends? - How is his relationship to his family / parents? Is he still in contact with them? - Does he have a house where he can return to after an adventure? 1 Characters: Iron Wing Celes Grayhoove , Blazing Storm , Duran the lynx , "Thorn" the ebony Timberwolf, Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nomadic 210 August 6, 2013 Author Share August 6, 2013 (edited) Hmm... i like the name of your OC, also because of the German reference. What i think is missing is a better developed cutie mark story, also i miss a bit the appearance describtion. Then i have several questions: - Does he have friends? - How is his relationship to his family / parents? Is he still in contact with them? - Does he have a house where he can return to after an adventure? Well, this mainly just a way to exercise my creative writing muscles, and burn off the five cups of coffee I had last night, lol. The cutie mark section was left vague because I was mainly starting to get wrist cramps from too much writing, since I tend to write mostly everything down before typing it up, so much useless/unusable text was written in my notebook tonight, and the appearance will come with time I don't have a good enough idea of what I want her to look like yet. -Friendships I generally have a hard time writing, and couldn't think of anything concrete to write down, help on this section would be appreciated. -Her relationship to her family is on good terms, and no she is not in contact with them currently which is why she mentions on how she misses them. -She doesn't currently have a home due to the fact of her compulsive need to explore. Edited August 6, 2013 by Nomadic OC Info: Monkshood, the Apothecary, Denarius, the Gambler (In Progress) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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