Anyone Want To Use this Idea?

[Moderately Momo 6]

Hi!  I'm Moderately Momo.  I am putting an OC up for takes.  Anypony want her?  Her name is Raven Haunt.  Her family is loyal to Queen Chrysalis, and in the picture, her dad just went to war, and then the door slams open.  She's saying "Daddy" because she thinks that her father opened the door.  But then, the Celestial Guards start to storm her house, and breaking her things.

     If you don't want her, give hints how to make her better.

Edited April 28, 2014 by Moderately Momo

[C.C. 66]

Hints about how to make her better:

-Dragon wings. No pony really likes dragon wings. Plus it would be extremely difficult for a dragon to...er....have a pony or other way around.
-Dragon eyes. Again with the dragon....er....thing.
-Red and black are among the cliches of MLP OCing.
-Mares' hooves can't usually be seen a different collar than their fur.
-The freckles seem out of place here, but that's just me.
-Loyal to the Changeling Queen? She's not even a changeling from what I see.

 

Final Product:
Try some new colors, because a lot of ponies have your pony's colors. If she is loyal to Queen Chrysalis, than make her a changeling, and you should get rid of the dragon-like features.

[Your Nightly Spectre 1,061]

Papa Stalin thinks there is an extreme lack of communism in this character...

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...oh and bloodshed, lots of unnecessary bloodshed.