This Day Aria - Rewritten and w/ Twilight and Chrystal {Parody}

[~ Indigo Windigo ~ 232]

Hi! I'ts Pinkeh Pie! I jut made a parody about This Day aria v2!

I just named her Chrystal cuz Chrysalis + Crystal = Chrystal so it might be nice as Chrysalis' Daughter

 

[Chrystal]

This day is going to be perfect

The kind of day of which I've dreamed since I was small

Every filly, colts and mare

Would bow before me, as they dare

What they don't know is that I have fooled them all.

[Twilight]

This day was going to be perfect

The kind of day of which dreamed I've since I was small

But instead of having cakes

With all my friends to celebrate

My wedding bells, they may not ring for me at all.

[Chrystal]

I would care more 'bout the lies

I won't partake in any pies

Vows, I'll be saying "Yes I do"

 

I will want us to be together

And continue this forever

The truth is I just needed to be queen

 

 

No I do not love the groom

In my mind he'll soon be doomed

But I'll still want him to be all mine!!!

 

[Twilight]

Must escape before it's too late

Find a way to save the day

Hope, I'll be early if I may

 

I don't fear that I may lose him

To the one who wants to use him

Not care for, love, cherish him each day.

 

For I oh so love the groom

All my thoughts he does consume

Oh, Flash Sentry, I'll be there very soon!!

 

[Chrystal]

Now that it became so CHRYSTAL clear

That I am coming much very near.

 

[Twilight]

Oh the wedding we won't make

He'll end up marrying a fake

Flash Sentry will be...

 

[Chrystal]

...Mine, all mine [EVIL LAUGH]

 

I'm a bad song writer, it's ok. I will fix it if u comment.
I sing a little bad too. It's ok. I will practice.
My voice sounds like a kid though. I will try to make it more mature

Edited May 23, 2014 by Pinkeh Pie

[Rascal~ 657]

Good, pretty good, just need to fix some things up from the singers point of view. 
Sorry, I just sang it out loud and I noticed a few things that wouldn't work. 
 

[Twilight] This day was going to be perfect
The kind of day of which I've since I was small
But instead of seeing him
I can even lose my limbs
My wedding bells, they may not ring for me at all.

You missed dreamed in the second line, and I don't know what the limbs thing is about. If I knew the context I think it would sound better but currently the whole line feels out of placed. 
 

I don't fear to lose the clone
Or I'll transform into stone
Not than, live in a happy life

Not than, live in a happy life, doesn't sound right. Like completely wrong

For I oh so love the groom
I'll die just because of him
Oh, Flash Sentry, I'll be there very soon!!  

And again, I'll just die because of him doesn't sound right either. 
 

[Chrystal] Now that it became so CHRYSTAL clear
I am coming very very near

Also, you need more words in the very very near line. In order for the melody for the voice to fit, I had to say very like 4-5 times. 

But I think those are the only places where they need to be changed, and I would be happy to sing the crystal Chrysalis parts. 

 

[~ Indigo Windigo ~ 232]

Good, pretty good, just need to fix some things up from the singers point of view. 

Sorry, I just sang it out loud and I noticed a few things that wouldn't work. 

 

You missed dreamed in the second line, and I don't know what the limbs thing is about. If I knew the context I think it would sound better but currently the whole line feels out of placed. 

 

Not than, live in a happy life, doesn't sound right. Like completely wrong

And again, I'll just die because of him doesn't sound right either. 

 

Also, you need more words in the very very near line. In order for the melody for the voice to fit, I had to say very like 4-5 times. 

 

But I think those are the only places where they need to be changed, and I would be happy to sing the crystal Chrysalis parts. 

Thx! I will fix those! Right now!

and I will be Twilight, but can someone help me: Whenever I want to save when I recorded. I played it and I can't hear anything