So, I've been digging around some short stories I wrote a few years ago and this one caught my eye. It's a short piece that I wrote for a English class during my second year in college. Just want to get some critique, see if there's any places I can improve with this piece.
Also, for the record this was part of a series of stories I was in the process of writing set in the same universe (hence the reference to "Luxuria" in the title, it's the kingdom this is based in). I may or may not post
Read the title? You have? Good, cause when I say "one tiny detail" I really do mean "one tiny detail".
I understand the video was posted a little more than a week ago. Please forgive me if I aren't up to date on the latest MLP stuff - a lot of the people I know won't take well if they found out I'm a brony so I'm having to kinda "stay in the closet" if you will.
If you haven't seen MangaKamen's video, well I'll have it here, though I will warn you.
SPOILER ALERT
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