I've left it late again, this time I am too tired to actually do the plot any justice so I am going to look at the simple narrative style.

The narrative as originally stated will still be first person from each pony including thoughts and speech. This means I don't have to set the scene explicitly allowing my pony creations to choose what they see adding emphasis to their character and soo much more. I would like to do a bit of stream of consciousness but boy am I not skilled enough to pull that of for the whole story. So I will use the idea of visuals, sounds and memories coming together to create apparent leaps in conversation so common in the real world.

I am currently 'reading' Ulysses and I would not want to put that mental struggle on anyone reading this story. But it definitely makes the interactions more fluid whilst allowing the reader to see how the characters are interacting. But, I do not want to let out the story of Eniac instantly and also do not want the readers to have the full picture otherwise the story will become boring beyond literary techniques I cannot use effectively.

So the story starts in the landlords perspective as Eniac arrives. Straight in. As in mid train of thought 'cause how am I supposed to discern the start of this ponies thoughts, when he wakes up? So I have to wait a day, writing useless gibberish?!?!? NO. I REFUSE TO HELP THE READER. THEY WILL HAVE TO PICK UP THE FLOW FROM THE GET GO. Anyway, at this point the reader is bamboozled and we have no idea of who Eniac is. Maybe even passing him off as irrelevant.

Then maybe flow between people until we reach Sugar. Thinking of the same as a cinematic effect I saw where the camera is very blurry moving fast through a scene until the main character pops up and the camera focuses. But in literature.

Anyway from here we have Sugars narrative getting to know her a bit and her efforts to find Eniac. As this happens snippets of Eniac's thoughts start to jump in. THEN Eniac goes full monologue as we go to him trying to find Sugar, but his thoughts are reserved from himself and the reader! On meeting with have the full mingle of thoughts and speech as they start to open up to each other (Again not a relationship as of yet...) allowing the next chapter to be the staccato thoughts and dialogue between the two.

Then Sugar finds Eniac's secret, silence except Eniac's thoughts. But then he sees her amazement as her bewildered thoughts enter the literary landscape. Now the thoughts between the two are fluid. Eniac's thoughts become more open and caring and Sugar's are less concerned as to what other's think or what she has to do for them.

Now we have Eniac becoming more focused on other ponies and the story loses Sugar's thoughts. Then we have a single monologue from Sugar as she decides to leave, just before Eniac has his monologue of not feeling liked for himself but rather his inventions. The two thoughts and dialogues start to merge as Eniac seeks out Sugar.

THEN THE END There thoughts merge like dialogue as in the feed of each other, complete merge. This is how I feel when talking to my best friends, we start to occupy the same mental landscape. This is apparent with my brother when we are really messing around or comforting each other, I swear we think the same thing and can send thoughts to each other. NO JOKE. I AM VERY SCIENTIFIC AND ANALYTICAL BUT I FEEL THIS IS A THING. the reason is evolution as connecting with others is super important and growing up together means our thoughts are very similar.

Anyway, this I realise is a major part as it is how I have to see and shape the world. I don't focus on details or the scene I focus on the ponies and their mental landscape everything else slots into place. This is why I focus on characters, they are who the reader relates to and they dictate how the plot moves, not me not the reader. I choose who they are not what they will do.