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Rainbow Factory: Pink Streak (RF Sequel) Part 1


Dah Onion Eater

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Epilogue

The Rainbow Factory was abuzz with noise, the hum of machines, the occasional mumble of a worker. In Rainbow's office, there was a chatter, someone new coming to apply? Perhaps, perhaps...

An orange mare was lurking in the shadows, her head hidden by a hood, she listened in on the conversation, a wisp of a magenta mane was sticking out from the hood. 

"You're...Zera...Right?" said a raspy voice, which the mare could only assume was Rainbow Dash

"Yes ma'am, Zera Brightbolt," came another voice, deep, and almost nasally, a bit meek, but excited all the same.

"Normally, we don't accept pegasi of your....appearance" said Dash.

The mare peeped a magenta eye through the keyhole, she saw a zebra-like pegasus, the pegasus stallion cocked an eyebrow at Dash's statement but sighed and sat back again.

The orange pony shifted her gaze at the stallion's wings, they were...oddly, not real, made of metal. Titanium, she supposed, and the tips of which, were brightly colored.

Dash spoke again "but, we're short staffed, and you've got an eye for rainbows, kid...Welcome to the factory," she grinned, and gave the newcomer a lab coat.

"Thank you! Thank you!" the newcomer cried, as he bounded toward the door, the mare who'd been spying backed up against a wall and panickedly scrambled away.

Zera Brightbolt saw the mare running away, "Hey come back!" he cried, but she was long gone. 

Chapter 1 

The Zegasus trotted through the factory and saw the ginormous machines, he was floored by it all, his eyes sparkled with the wonder of a foal in a candy store.

He was so excited to learn how to make the rainbows, but...when he saw a little purple pegasus in the machine, the little colt was trembling, Zera cried out, why didn't anypony stop it!

"WHOA-OH!" Zera cried reaching a hoof out to the colt, Rainbow dragged the Zegasus back, "what are you doing!?" she growled, "the- the- colt!" Zera sobbed, "what? That's the purple for this week! Get your head together!" Rainbow snapped.

"T-the purple?" Zera stuttered, "UGH! Nopony told you kid? Spectra comes from those who can't fly!" Rainbow griped, she muttered nonsense and stumbled away, deliberately kicking over a pony named Sunny Daze based on her name tag. 

Zera heard Dash grumble what sounded like "Worthless workers," and some more gibberish behind it. He was horrified by this realization, he stumbled over to the worker named Sunny Daze, "are you alright?" cried Zera, taking her hoof. 

"Oi, damn Dash, always picking on us, screw that shit," cried Sunny, fluttering her wings. "Oh, I'm fine, just, screw her," she turned to Zera, she cocked an eyebrow "you really didn't know? That other pegasi come to form a rainbow?" Zera shook his head, "It's horrible, but that's how it works...Call me Daze," she had changed the subject.

Daze looked at Zera, "Kid, if you don't shape up fast, you're gonna end up like that colt," Zera pinned his ears back, he thought that the rumors were done, he thought Dash changed, but...he was wrong, like H8 Seed had said...she was evil. 

"Anyways, I'm assigned as your work partner, so, I'll be seeing you later, shift's over," Daze said, winking over her shoulder as she trotted away.

Zera hesitantly slunk away to his work room, only to find  the mare with the hood, rummaging through his files, "Who are you?!" he shouted, the mare sharply shushed him, and pulled down her hood, "Name's Scootaloo, Scootaloo Thunderflight," 

Flashback

Absentia scattered through the factory, she fluttered her wings and jumped, there was something dripping off her coat, she seemed to fall, but her wings finally opened and she flew...one thought grazed her mind, "Scootaloo" but who was Scootaloo? "You are Scootaloo," the thought was completed, Absentia, or rather Scootaloo, cried in delight "Woohoo!" she screamed at the top of her lungs, and her friends Corona and Cloud Cover joined her, Corona and Cloud Cover managed to escape...

But Scootaloo stopped, as the doors slowly shut, she could hear her friends calling for her, "Absentia! No!" cried Corona, "Absentia, please!" Cloud Cover sobbed, the two banged on the door with their hooves, Scootaloo smiled and cried, bowing her head, "Absentia! Absentia! Please, no!" the two cried, but the doors finally shut. 

Scoot put her hood over her head, and flew back into the depths of the factory.

To Be Continued...

Edited by Dah Onion Eater

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Fan fiction, with creative freedom, comes a dark side.

I know you like Rainbow Factory however some of us find the idea of Rainbow Dash doing all this creepy, perhaps even, too much.

Then again, I've been thinking over a part of my MLP fan fiction which others may find disturbing. Princess Luna using the nightmare realm to help my OC to deal with phobia by gradually exposing my OC to it over and over until they adapt. A test of courage would make living in that fantasy world meaningful. I may have to ask a friend to co-author that part in though.

The difference is though, Luna would not be doing this to torture my OC, she would be teaching my OC to learn to face their fear, and not let it destroy their life or prevent them from living life to the full. 

I think this is entirely in character for Luna to do, given her behaviour in MLP FIM. Some people may be of the opinion that is cruel, but it's not, it is the opposite in fact. You know some people wish they could be Ponies in Equestria though it'll never happen for real, but they do need to be careful for what they wish for, because there would be tests of courage and loyalty in that world.

If I were my OC in that fantasy world, would I be afraid of this outcome? yes, of course, anyone else would be in that situation, however sooner or later, if friendship happened in some alternate reality with her, Luna would probably ask my OC at least try, and I don't blame her. I did say I'd want my loyalty to be tested so this would be a good way to do it. My OC choosing not to put effort into something like this could come off as selfish I think, and I would not want to burden anypony there, others have problems too, both there and in the real world.

 

Rainbow Factory fanfic on the other hoof depicts Rainbow Dash as a sadist, it's not a bad fanfic, all it is, is a what if story which can be fun for some people, however it is outside the bounds of what MLP official typically depicts, and it most definitely will be off putting for a lot of people, and not appropriate for children, obviously. When I watched Rainbow Factory, I hated RD in that one I got to admit, but that was the point I guess.

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2 hours ago, Dawnshine Wonder said:


Fan fiction, with creative freedom, comes a dark side.

I know you like Rainbow Factory however some of us find the idea of Rainbow Dash doing all this creepy, perhaps even, too much.

Then again, I've been thinking over a part of my MLP fan fiction which others may find disturbing. Princess Luna using the nightmare realm to help my OC to deal with phobia by gradually exposing my OC to it over and over until they adapt. A test of courage would make living in that fantasy world meaningful. I may have to ask a friend to co-author that part in though.

The difference is though, Luna would not be doing this to torture my OC, she would be teaching my OC to learn to face their fear, and not let it destroy their life or prevent them from living life to the full. 

I think this is entirely in character for Luna to do, given her behaviour in MLP FIM. Some people may be of the opinion that is cruel, but it's not, it is the opposite in fact. You know some people wish they could be Ponies in Equestria though it'll never happen for real, but they do need to be careful for what they wish for, because there would be tests of courage and loyalty in that world.

If I were my OC in that fantasy world, would I be afraid of this outcome? yes, of course, anyone else would be in that situation, however sooner or later, if friendship happened in some alternate reality with her, Luna would probably ask my OC at least try, and I don't blame her. I did say I'd want my loyalty to be tested so this would be a good way to do it. My OC choosing not to put effort into something like this could come off as selfish I think, and I would not want to burden anypony there, others have problems too, both there and in the real world.

 

Rainbow Factory fanfic on the other hoof depicts Rainbow Dash as a sadist, it's not a bad fanfic, all it is, is a what if story which can be fun for some people, however it is outside the bounds of what MLP official typically depicts, and it most definitely will be off putting for a lot of people, and not appropriate for children, obviously. When I watched Rainbow Factory, I hated RD in that one I got to admit, but that was the point I guess.

Sorry :(

 

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