Hey Guys, it's Derpy , again with a new Fan Fic Review today it follows the story of Dinky Doo (Derpy Hooves's Daughter) who has enslaved all of Equestria with her Adorableness to become a princess so it's up to Octavia and Vinyl Scratch to make all of Equestria no longer serve Dinky for her designs that she creates.

My Thoughts

This was a good story to read the humor it has isn't overdone it balances out the humor between its "seriousness" it does have some weird moments but for the bulk of the story, it keeps within the canon and it also comes apart from the canon at some spots, but it is soon going straight back into it, the story is spread out in 3 chapters with an epilogue which is just what rewards Octavia and Vinyl are going to receive after the story is over the rewards are kind of strange

The Idea was Pretty Good the idea of a Filly becoming an ultimate ruler of Equestria was a very interesting Idea to read about the author kept the idea rooted in the story, it didn't just get introduced and was just talked about once in a while it gradually was acted out in spots.

The Plot wasn't that Confusing and a bit Straight Forward and doesn't really walk away from the ending if it did walk away from the ending it would definitely would have to be longer, but it would probably add like a quarter chapter to the story to keep its charm and not feel dragged out.

​The Execution of the story was alright it was wrote in Octavia's POV (Point of View) and i didn't find any visible holes within the plot but i could of missed them (so my final score won't factor in the Execution of the plot so this is going to be brief) the problems were solved in the ending but there was only one problem and that was Dinky but there's a bit of a plot hole i have found which was

My Final Score is 8.5/10

Certain Things Need to be Improved

Sequel Worthy? No this story wrapped everything up in such a way that there isn't anything sequel worthy to be found.

Anyway I have to go.

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