Crystal Vision

Crystal groaned, awaking in her cave. A letter had been dropped by her snout. The sun hit her eyes, blinding her a little, making her wince and cover her eyes. After a few moments she noticed the letter, tilting her head in curiosity. No one ever dropped by.. she had no friends.. who would this be from?.. Crystal used her claws to open the small letter, at least to her, pulling out a piece of parchment. Having had no education in her life.. reading was rather hard for her, however this letter she could read. "Dinner.. with King Sombra.. and I have to attend... why would he want me-" she paused, noticing a stallion standing by the entrance of her cave. "I'm.. guessing you're here to take me to the dinner.." She stood slowly, stretching out her large dragon wings, yawning widely. "Well I'm afraid to inform you that carriage just won't do.. its far too small for me.." The stallion grunted, coming to a realization. He pulled out some rope and magically tied it around her neck and to the carriage. He smirked and galloped off, down the mountain. Somehow dragging the large 1.5ton dragon pony behind him. Crystal gasped and sighed. "Magic.." she cantered after the carriage, following it into the destination.... The stallion slowed once they reached their destination, untying Crystal and forcing her in the building. "I'm going, I'm going.. geez.." The doors shut behind her... locking. Turning her head, she peered around the room, 5 ponies were mingling.. she felt very uncomfortable all of a sudden, her tail curling under her like a frightened dog.. (Crystal's physical look.. just so you guys know: http://sta.sh/2qdxif9xfq8?edit=1 ) (Also I hope I started out right hah ^^; )

Ahh thankyou! Yeah I really enjoy the ponies I have to draw X3

This was a competition entry. His name is Gentle Spirit. He's like a priest or something XD (Ahhh traditional)

Yes I iz worried X3 Ah, thankyou that means alot.. Definitely stepping it up from my old oc Moon Chaser :\ Thankyou! I'm so glad you like her OC's are fun to make! You'll get one. One day when you feel inspired :3

Thankyou! She was very fun to draw :3

I'm sure I could add that Ah thanks hun! I love a good rp, you just let me know

Oh thankyou What would you suggest for her backstory? or are you just wanting more detail? ^^

So, I'm just wanting to hear your opinions on my oc. I'm pretty happy with her design and story but hey, wanted to hear your opinions Constructive Criticism, not rudeness. Thanks! ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ So this is my OC: Crystal with her little girlfriend :3 More refs: http://sta.sh/22f0o97zsn7v?edit=1 --------------------------------------------------------------------------- Her bio: Name: Crystal Vision Nicknames: Crys | Crysi Gender: Female Height: Larger than Celestia Body Shape/Type: Celestia’s body shape, but buffer. Quite dragon like Age: 28 Birthplace: Unknown, yet she says Canterlot Hair colour, length, style: Light blue with darker blue spots. It drapes over to the right and sits long and wavy. Cutiemark: Her cutiemark is blue dragon scales. They run down her back legs. How did they earn the cutiemark?: She earned her cutiemark by protecting two ponies from a pack of Timberwolves. The ponies ran away, ungrateful for their rescue but all was not a loss as she earned her mark. Cutiemark Meaning: As dragon scales/hide is hard to damage or penetrate, it represents her defensive instincts and skills. They are dragon scales to be a constant reminder of what she is. Race: Ice Dragon pony hybrid Accent: (include voice, style of speech, slang, signature phrases or words): She speaks formally, like Luna but has a slight slur on her accent due to her native Dovahzul language. She doesn’t know how she knows Dovahzul. (Dovahzul is native dragon language. Yes it's from skyrim) Marital status (Married, Single): Dating VelvetLexi ‘s oc Katisha Alcatraz. Scars or other notable physical attributes: She has a damaged tail, bound in bandage. Hurt by a poisoned knife throw from a bounty hunter. She has freckle-like scales on her cheeks. Athletic? Inactive? Overall health? She’s pretty athletic, loves to go for a fly. Accessories? None, unless the bandage counts. Favourite colours: She likes soft, cool colours. How does the character feel about his/her appearance? She is sometimes embarrassed of her appearance, scared she will scare ponies with her size and dragon features. Brothers/sisters: She has a fiery sister named Flare Shot. Relationship with parents: Did not know her parents. Memories about childhood: She and her sister were dumped in a box, abandoned. Resented by those around them, she and her sister raised themselves. They took care of each other until they were old enough to go their separate ways. Educational background? (Street smart? Formal? Does he/she read?): Formal in speech, can use thou, thy and speak in third person on occasion. She did not attend school so big words can stump her. Occupation: Unemployed Where does the character live now? Describe? She lives up in the cave system of the Canterlot Mountains. Her ‘main’ cave is filled with quartz stalagmites and stalactites; it also has a pure water pool. Is he/she neat or messy? She’s somewhere in between, she likes to be clean but eats like a carnivore. Sexual preferences: She’s pansexual, open to male, female and transgenders. What sex of friends does she/he prefer? Mares or Stallions?: She just wants anyone to give her a chance, so she doesn’t mind what gender. Most of her friends consist of the female gender. Pets? No pets, she can barely control herself so a pet would make it even worse. Enemies? Why? She doesn’t have any known enemies, but there are ponies that resent her presence due to her looks and traits. Bounty hunters can be counted as enemies. Basic nature: Pretty hostile toward people who judge her immediately (in a negative way) or try to hurt her, but she does have a curious and gentle nature. Personality traits (shy, outgoing, domineering, doormat, honest, kind, sense of humour): She is rather outgoing and smart (except for modern pony gestures and speech). When you get to know her, she is kind, curious and can be rather humorous. Strongest trait: Despite her hostile appearance, she is extremely kind and gentle to those who are the same back to her. Weakest trait: She can lose control of her emotions and get hostile toward others, even to the point of hurting them… badly. She calls this state of mind the ‘beast’. (Explained below) What does the character fear? She is scared that the ‘beast’ inside will hurt or kill her girlfriend and friends or she will be alone for the rest of her life. What is the character proud of? Crystal has been very proud of somehow achieving her cutiemark. She never would have thought of getting the chance to discover her true talent. She is also proud of having Katisha in her life, never thinking she’d be loved. What is the character ashamed of? She is ashamed of multiple things. Her race, she sometimes wishes she was born a normal race. She has also (in a rampage from the ‘beast’) eaten ponies. She regrets her actions but knew that she couldn’t stop herself. Outlook on life (optimistic, pessimistic, cynic, idealist): She is optimistic on life as she hopes it will get better. Yet she sometimes is pessimistic as she feels she may be alone for the rest of her life. Ambitions: She wants to be a mercenary, hired to protect whoever or whatever the employer desires. She hopes to work for the royals but isn’t certain that wish will come true. How does the character see himself/herself? She sees herself as a gentle and nurturing pony. She can be hostile at times but that’s only to protect herself or others. How is the character seen by others? Crystal has different opinions from different ponies, most see her as a dangerous, hostile half breed and is incapable of camaraderie. While others see her as a misunderstood, graceful creature whose curiosity can sometimes get the better of her. Backstory/Bio: Crystal and her fire dragon pony sister, Flare Shot, were dumped at the edge of a village. Ponies peeked into the box to see what was inside, only to be scared out of their wits by two hungry dragon-like foals. No one wanted to take them in, not even the orphanage, so Flare and Crystal grew up homeless and fighting for survival. As they reached young adult-hood, they parted ways as they each wanted to have a future. Crystal used to live in the cave systems in Canterlot's Mountain/cliff face, occasionally going into the city to eat and try make contact with any ponies willing to give her a chance. About her beast state: Her beast state can be triggered by immense anger, extreme hunger and sometimes when she just lets go of herself. In the beast state she will attack anything she sees, hears or smells. Her strength, speed, size and ice spitting abilities grow dangerously. Crystal can, and majority of the time will, extremely damage or kill the victim. She may or may not eat it. She can be rescued from this state by ponies reminding her of her true self or if she does something extremely horrible to someone she holds dear. This can differ depending on how she got to the state. She will punish herself afterward or isolate herself if she is truly distraught on the way her beast state made her act. Thanks guys!

New commission! Her name is Bowtie No I did not use a base.

Tantabus?

Quite cute for your first attempt! If you'd like a critique, all I can say is, just take a little look at anatomy to get those legs right

Hun, when trading ponies, here's a tip. People don't want ponies made from the pony creator. Anyone can go and make them. The pony creator is actually a copyrighted game to GeneralZoi. These are the rules posted in the description of his game. You're welcome to go check if you like. Rules: - Don't sell images from the game. - Don't post the game to any other sites. - Crediting me for your images is not required, but remember that whether you credit me or not you can't sell them. Not meaning to be all doom and gloom but copyright is a serious thing. You can get in a lot of trouble.

All I can say is, unless its done properly, do not include Canon Ponies in your Backstory. Especially princesses. It puts the OC down the immediate route of being a mary-sue. Why does she have mental issues? Genetic? Some Traumatic experience? You must include this. Her cutiemark cannot be a moon. Her personality doesn't back it up. I would suggest lightening the coat. Black coats aren't very appealing. Her name feels like a mouthfull.. maybe Sapphire Star?

^ Though it is Fire Twilight, it also looks like Spitfire to me, just if her mane was more orange

Yeah, I agree. You do have many colours in her design. It's easier to stick to a simple colour scheme that's pleasing to the eye. The scarf also, if you are to keep it, it should be a blue or something, not a red as it's introducing yet another colour. ----------- Also, how she was named Monster Controller.. why not Beast Tamer.. Monster controller is good.. but it just sounds a lot less... friendly? I mean, she's using the creatures for help, not controlling them like Sombra did with the Crystal Empire ^^; Making the Manticore in trouble sounds better than a timberwolf. I also find the Depression bit not really needing to be there? I mean yes, she was bullied when young.. but you could make her as if it didn't bother her? She seems like a strong character, seeing as she tames creatures so I feel the depression wouldn't bother her. (what doesn't kill you makes you stronger!) ------ Heh, hope she doesn't encounter my little creature of a ponysona XD

Ah well.. mine was on the 17th of May. Will have to comeback next year

Well thats okay, I have other creatures, not just ponies. If you feel more comfortable with that of course ^^

@@Tealeaf If I could see some examples of your work? I'd love to. You just pm me here on on my dA ^^ You'll have to be patient with me though, I have a long list to do of commissions @@SFyr Thankyou so much! Yeah I had a lot of fun I like all the quirky unique designs Oh my, thnkyou for the kind comment @@Stardust* <3

Show style commission of a Pegasus named Sweet Skies. No I did not use a base. This is all my literate work. Loads more show style coming this way soon.. I got a ton of them to do o.o Along with a few vectors from the actual show! Maybe xDD And another commission of an OC named Cupcake Once again, no base Achieved an EQDaily on it too ^^ Source 36: http://www.equestria...stuff-1899.html

And more: Free to use vector of Flurry being an absolute mary sue. Please credit me as I spent a lot of time on it.. ---------------------------------- Birthday Gift for a friend of their slightly crazy Magician oc Aleka Zam --------------------------------------------------- A no eraser challege. Drew this in particular as I hit 9months with my girlfriend. I love you sweetie <3 Crystal, being an ice dragon pony, can bear the cold. However Katisha doesn't want to be anywhere else but with her... So Crystal has given her warm ear muffs and is putting a scarf on her, so she'll stay a warm lil kitty kat.

Gift for someone of their OC Lil Lovey No these are not bases. I vectored them myself, each line is made with a mouse. I saw they were missing the 'Crystal Pony' version of him on their reference sheet... so I decided to be generous XD I had to changed the hairstyle to a more Crystal pony ish one (The ref sheet:)

Heh aww XD

Ah thank you so muchhhhhhhhhhhh!!