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Ice Storm


Ice Storm
  • , No, Not Cast Young Mare

    Eye Color: Cerulean

     

    Coat Color: Ice blue with a small patch of Deep ocean blue on her flank

     

    Mane/Tail/Markings Color & Style:

    The Style of her mane is almost the same as twilight Sparkles in how her mane is held, but the mane is a deep blue, just a bit lighter than the blue on her flank, with a white stripe running down the center. Her tail, has shte smae styling that Rainbow's does, however, not the same coloration. The deep blue and white stripes alternate down her tail starting with blue at the top.

     

    Physique: She is a unicorn. She is a bit buff from her travels across Equestria, but she's still slender in design.

    female Unicorn Her Cutie Mark is two shards of ice that are buried into some snow. Her cutie mark signifies her power over the element of Ice, and how she can manipulate it with ease. https://buffy.mlpforums.com/a7369a84100ea761582794437db26237.png

    Ice's personality is very complex. She is very intelligent, she's very bouncy, and can be very generous once ponies get to know her. She will go out of her way to help somepony she cares about, not caring about any bind that it might put her in and she will always see things through. That being said she's all about having fun, and is normally in a good mood until somepony brings something up that reminds her of her past. then she can easily fall into a small depression for the day.

     

    That being said, there are a few things you shouldn't do around her. Disrespect is the quickes way to get a hoof to the face with her. She doesn't tolerate it. At all. After she'd been the target of it so much herself, she refuses to let others be treated in such a manner,

    Likes: Droughts, excessivly long days, Hot Temperatures, and falling asleep

    Ice Storm was born in Fillydelphia, and she hated it there. The only thing she remembers about the place was how much pain she felt while she lived there. Everything started off fine. Her mother Mist Weaver, and her Father Silver Mane were always there, as parents should be. However, a couple years later, everything changed. That was when a popular Trottingham Aristocrat named Golden hoof appeared.

     

    He had originally one of the primary supporters of the Aquarium that her mother had in Filly. It was, and possibly still is the largest aquarium in Fillydelphia. Her mother had every type of fish that she could get her hooves on in each tunnelized tank. She had a knack for knowing which fish could go well with each other to avoid unwanted drama within the aquarium. When Golden Hoof arrived, he began to pour even more money into the family and over time, the money and the fame began to go to her parents’ heads.

     

    On top of all this Golden Hoof disliked Ice Storm. In fact, this was true of most fillies and colts. He was under the impression that they cost too much and took too much time to take care of. So he wanted nothing to do with them.

     

    Her parents meanwhile had gotten swept away by fame and wealth, and after a while forgot that she was even there. The never showed her any sort of love, or affection, and the only time they actually noticed her was when she started wetting the bed in her early foal years. They took her to visit a few doctors, but none figured out what was wrong or how to fix it.

     

    After that, the only thing that her parents did was buy her things. Now, most ponies would be happy with being able to get anything they wanted at a moments whim, and many of these things were expensive. However, they were still material items that meant nothing to her. Only a couple of these items were an exception. These were the two pairs of hoof-bracelets that her mother bought her. They were made from pure white gold, as the ones on her front hooves were diamond inlaid while the ones on her hind hooves were Sapphire.

     

    On top of this all of the other fillies had been bullying her in ponycare and pony school as she hadn't developed any sort of magic. This was made even harder for her because at least the other fillies in the school with similar issues had a family to go home to and take care of them. She just went home to what she felt like were empty shells of her parents. There was no love there, only fame and fortune. They had fallen under the misconception that love could be bought. Ice was more than aware of how false that was. Her parents never understood this when she brought it up, and she finally got tired of it.

     

    She decided to leave. Upon doing so, however, decided to give her parents one last chance. She stood in her doorway for an hour yelling that she was leaving and never coming back. Her parents never looked up, not once. She left disheartened with only her bracelets and a small bag of personal belongings. She wanted her old parents back before they got swept away in money, and her bracelets were the beacon of hope that someday she could get her old parents back.

     

    Once she was out of the city, she felt something that she had never felt before, relief. She had done it. She had built up the nerve to leave Phillydelphia behind. Now she just needed to figure out where the best place for her to go. Without a second though, she went to the once city that she had heard about in ponycare. She left Fillydelphia, heading for Canterlot.

    Much to her dismay, what she failed to remember, was that Canterlot was on the top of a mountain. Fortunately, the mountain paths that were marked going up along the sides. When she got most of the way there, however, an ice storm moved in. Ice Storm was caught off guard, and didn’t know what to do. Shelter was a priority, but nothing was close. She continued, figuring that she would run into a cave eventually. It was a mountain. There had to be a cave somewhere close by. Unfortunately there wasn't, and she was getting tired.

     

    She fell to the ground exhausted and when she did, her unicorn horn went off. Her eyes when white and ice started to mold around her. It started to take shape in the form of a small hut that enclosed around her. The amount of energy that had been taken from her was immense. When she recovered she had no idea what had happened, but she looked around her, and she was inside a shelter of ice that she had just made the night. Another bright light filled the small ice hut. It worried her until she saw that it was coming from her flank. When it cleared, it showed her new cutie mark. It was two shards of ice in a mound of snow. This made her very happy. She blacked out moments later.

     

    The next morning, she made it to Canterlot. She hoped that the ponies in Canterlot would be nicer than in Philly. That wasn't the case though. The ponies in Canterlot were worse that Fillydelphia. They didn't accept anypony that wasn't born there. The only ponies that had shown her any kindness was her very few friends, whom she had also found out weren’t from Canterlot. They suggested to her to go to the magic academy since she was a unicorn. They figured it couldn’t hurt and she decided to give it a shot.

     

    Not too long afterward, she became a student of the academy. She had passed the necessary material to get in. They noted that while she wasn't very skilled in the way of most magics, she had an extremely high amount of potential with the arcane arts of Ice. After a while, her instructors were able to refine Ice's ice magic to where it cost her almost no energy to cast.

     

    This, however, didn’t stop the other Canterlot fillies from making it known that she wasn’t from around here. This began eating at her. The disrespect that was being shown to others simply because of where they were from was absurd. This didn’t make any sense to her at all as everypony was still just that, a Pony. She didn’t see what made one pony so special over somepony else. No pony had a right to be treated like that.

     

    This is also where she met her two closest friends, Silverheart and Moonbliss. There were a few of the only ones in the academy that stood up for her. Like herself, they weren’t from Canterlot either. They showed what a true friend was, and what it was like to be one. However, even the help of her friends wasn’t enough to sway Canterlot. She knew that while no two ponies were a like, she hated nobility and how they treated others. Eventually, this lead to her just wanting her parents back, and bringing back old memories.

     

    Eventually, she decided to open a store with her ice magic, and would sell tasty frozen treats during the summer time. She figured that everypony, even as snobby as many were here, would enjoy ice cream and snow cones. She was wrong. While there were the happy customers that found her store to be one of the best places in Canterlot, there were equally as many that hated it because of the carnival snacks that she sold. Many though it was to beneath their higher palettes of acquired tastes.

     

    The final straw that made her want to leave Canterlot before she hurt somepony was when Moonbliss had to step in front of her to calm her down after one of the sassy ponies had bucked her sign over and shattered it. She was so angry that she could feel the temperature dropping around her. Thankfully Moonbliss calmed her down, and after a long night of discussion, they decided that it might be best for her to move her business to Ponyville. It wasn’t that far away so they could visit regularly, and from their understanding everypony there was a lot nicer. Now Ice lives inside her Frozen Delights Store in Ponyville. It stands three stories with her living quarters above the café which is on the first floor.

    Magic:

     

    Ice Storm is a Rather Gifted Unicorn when it comes to magic, as she is very refined, and powerful with anything related to Ice, however she normally just uses this skill to make snow cones for her store in the summer time, and freeze the small pond in the winter for her ice rink and maintains the ice with her magic.

     

    Other forms of magic that she can control is the natural talent of Telekinesis (not counted in spell list), a Light spell, which can leave her winded after any long periods of use, and the occasional teleportation spell that she basically an emergency get away spell for her because it makes her extremely nauseous and pretty much incapable of any real movement afterwards for a good while.

     

    Origin/Residence:

    Fillydelphia, moved to Canterlot, then to Ponyville, (see Backstory)

     

    Occupation:

    Own Frozen Delights in the summer and runs an ice rink in the winter.

     

    Hobbies:

     

    Reading, stargazing, relaxing, and spending time with ponies willing to accept her.

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To be perfectly honest, this is unnecessarily longwinded. However, the fact that I was at no point tempted to just skim through to the end is a testament to how interesting and generally well done it is. Your character is accepted, but I imagine that's not exactly surprising news.

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Brilliantly designed character, great story, and now time for my renown criticism ( don't take to heart but a few things bother me and the OC is awesome ).  One thing is the formation of her cutie mark although representative of her ability to properly use ice magic in semblance to the misery suffered from the negligence of detached guardians it contradicts the want for friends and her genuinely warm personality.  Also to that end ice cream is only popular in the summer and so you have extra material to work with for what she does in winter. Also I may have to add to the argument since this is an in depth story that did she pass the academy or drop out to open her ice cream shop?  The last argument that I would like to present would be that in how extraordinarily complex her arrival to Ponyville you do not mention how old she is or what hobbies she possess ( ice skating obviously as mentioned from the lake but it had to be deduced, so what does she do other than oversee the shop in summer?).  Beside that well done and do not take my judgement for absentminded scorn or ill will, also I am cognizant that most oc's do not have nearly as long as a story line and that this is just a basic outline of your character which only becomes more finely etched and defined as rp's increase.  I am new to rp's and also saw you at Bronycon at the poniverse panel so I would like some pointers for my own OC and story.  Anyway well rounded character and I'll leave with that.                  

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Brilliantly designed character, great story, and now time for my renown criticism ( don't take to heart but a few things bother me and the OC is awesome ).  One thing is the formation of her cutie mark although representative of her ability to properly use ice magic in semblance to the misery suffered from the negligence of detached guardians it contradicts the want for friends and her genuinely warm personality.  Also to that end ice cream is only popular in the summer and so you have extra material to work with for what she does in winter. Also I may have to add to the argument since this is an in depth story that did she pass the academy or drop out to open her ice cream shop?  The last argument that I would like to present would be that in how extraordinarily complex her arrival to Ponyville you do not mention how old she is or what hobbies she possess ( ice skating obviously as mentioned from the lake but it had to be deduced, so what does she do other than oversee the shop in summer?).  Beside that well done and do not take my judgement for absentminded scorn or ill will, also I am cognizant that most oc's do not have nearly as long as a story line and that this is just a basic outline of your character which only becomes more finely etched and defined as rp's increase.  I am new to rp's and also saw you at Bronycon at the poniverse panel so I would like some pointers for my own OC and story.  Anyway well rounded character and I'll leave with that.                  

 

 

Thank you for your critique! sorry that I'm just now getting around to responding to it, as I've been a bit under the weather recently.

 

Her cutie mark simple represents her talent for Ice Magic. Nothing more, nothing less. It doesn't have a symbolic meaning or drive. That's actually the plainest thing about her. XD

 

As far as what she does in the winter, she actually runs a skating rink in the winter time, though I commend you on thinking about hobbies, because that was something that I hadn't really thought about for her. As far as how old she was when she got there, I have to be vague with that in this section. Simply because we don't know how long ponies live. She's only recently moved there from Canterlot though.

 

In looking it over though I do realize that I had put down the wrong occupation for her in the Other section, as she actually owns her own shop as stated in the backstory, not what the occupation currently lists it as. Will have to edit that.

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