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  • Stained Steel


    dashian500

    • Age: 20

      Gender: Male

      Species: Pegasus

      Cutie Mark: A sword <br /> <br />Represents his ability to master fighting wth any type of Bladed weapon

      Personality: Steel is disant and Dosent talk much until he gets to know you or is angered he is truly a kind pony but hides this fact. He won't open up to any pony at all until he gets to know them and trusts them

      Backstory: At a young age steels grandfather could see steels potential so he took steel form his parents and began to train steel teaching him discipline and how to keep his emotions in cheek. Then steel began his trained with a sword and excelled within two years he had mastered every weapon his grandfather had as steel progressed his grandfather was amazed by him and began to teach him the secrets of the clan soon after steels training was complete his grandfather died steel assumed his role as the next head of the steel clan. After a few years Luna summoned him and asked him to be the head of her personal guard steel declined and for a year he wandered around meeting an orphan along the way the little philly was scared of steel buy liked him and soon she came to love him (like a father) steel adopted her and soon after accepted the job from Luna although it requires him to stay with Luna most of the time she sends him off on missions and often gives him time off to spend with Astrid or to do things he needs to do for the clams sake.

    Stained Steel

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    alright, now, lets get this review typed.

     

    name: actually, pretty good. nice double meaning, while sounding cool.

     

    cutie mark: makes sense, i guess.

     

    personality: really needs to be expanded on. you cant just summarize how someone feels, thinks, and acts with one sentence.

     

    backstory: well, it made semi-sense up until the whole 'quickly became the best assassin in equestria' thing. how did he get there? when did he realize his skill in assassination? also, whats the deal about 'demon blood?' and the deal with the devil, for immortality? and his love, moonbeam? why does this 'demonblood' abduct her? does steel and demon have some sort of rivalry?

     

    so, my impression of this oc, is likely a ponified Spawn. you know, the superhero?

    but if this is really a 100% original character, then your gonna have to expand on just about everything.

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