My Time With Sombra

[Jack Harper 1]

!!!INCOMPLETE DO NOT READ!!!

 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 1: My creation of evil

 

I sat there Tears streaming down my face turning my white fur a mushy grey. The Doctor told me that being in labor for so long left her to weak to fight the infection that came afterwards. Luckily my boy was Healthy and strong, he looked so much like his mother, dark coat, bright red curved horn so unique. He would most likely inherent her strong magic as well. I sat there staring at the cot she once laid in, I could feel nothing but darkness in my heart, a space once filled with light and happiness gone. After sitting there for hours waiting to hear any good news a nurse approached me and said that they had completed all the tests, and my boy was in excellent health and asked if I would like to see him. I replied with great enthusiasm saying "Yes please let me see my boy!". She led me down one pearly white hall after another finally coming to a wall of glass. I trotted up to it putting my hooves and muzzle up to the glass desperately trying to spot my boy. Rows of cradles holding newborn fillies and colts lay beyond the glass, i could not see into the cradles at the very back, nor could i see my boy. The nurse trotted over to a door beside the glass and quietly opened the door and went to the cradle at the back row to the far right. She pushed the cradle out into the hall then up to me. I looked into this red eyes peering up at me. I felt a smile forming on my mouth as tears streamed from my eyes. I held my boy in my hooves for the longest time, then whispered "Please... don't ever leave me... my dear Sombra.".

Edited July 5, 2013 by Jack Harper

[Discovery Dream 592]

Sounds neat! I'd try and make the chapters more descriptive, but you've got the basics down. Watch your spelling and puncuation and I think it'll be a fascinating story.

[Jack Harper 1]

Sounds neat! I'd try and make the chapters more descriptive, but you've got the basics down. Watch your spelling and puncuation and I think it'll be a fascinating story.

 

Thank you Miles, and yes my grammar does needs some work. I always start Chapter 1 off fairly short and the proceeding chapters are longer. I appreciate your input.