Dash-N - Equestria Gates

[Dash-N 13]

 

Hey guys, this is the very first song I ever did, so I just thought I'd share it! Now, before you go saying that it's bad, please keep in mind that this was my VERY FIRST song, and that I'm actually a lot better now at rap. Anyways, like I said, just thought I'd share, and I hope y'all can find some level of enjoyment in this! Now, just an FYI, I DID post the edited version because I wanted to be mindful of the people who do not enjoy cursing in songs. And yeah, that's about all I have to say about that!

 

Link to unedited version here: www.youtube.com/watch?v=AM6WYe3ImyY

 

YouTube description:

This is actually a parody I did, of a song called Pearly Gates. Not necessarily meant to be taken word-for-word, this is just basically a song about how bronies can be very serious about their fandom, I guess.

 

-Pepper Lightning

 

Download link: https://www.mediafire.com/?r7syqleb17ymd3c

 

Follow me on Twitter @PepperLightning

 

Lyrics:

[intro]

Is it true, what the good books say, concerning the Judgement Day, if I don't kneel down and pray?

 

[Chorus]

Brony, if I go to hell but you get to Equestria,

Just get me to the castle and I'll talk to Celestia

Made up my mind, I'm a brony all the way 'til I die

And even after death I want ponies for the afterlife

 

[Verse 1]

Now listen carefully because what I say is true,

Even when the show's done, the fandom will continue

And when that's gone, and bronies are nearly extinct,

I'll still watch the episodes every day of the week

 

I've seen the new episodes but I still want more

Never thought I'd say that in twenty-ten or before

Would've laughed in your face if you said I'd like MLP

But then came G4, the generation for me

 

And now I love all this fandom, and all the conventions

I make plans to go when I first hear them mentioned

Went to Comicon, bought pony clothes and a mane

And got my shirt signed by Tabitha St. Germain

 

So, God up there, I hope you hear me prayin'

I hope you understand what the f*ck I'm sayin'

I promise not to lie, cheat, steal or k*ll,

If you can promise me a place in the town Ponyville

 

[Chorus]

Brony, if I go to hell but you get to Equestria,

Just get me to the castle and I'll talk to Celestia

Made up my mind, I'm a brony all the way 'til I die

And even after death I want ponies for the afterlife

 

Brony, if I go to hell but you get to Equestria,

Just get me to the castle and I'll talk to Celestia

Made up my mind, I'm a brony all the way 'til I die

And even after death I want ponies for the afterlife

 

[Verse 2]

Some bronies say that I'm a bit dramatic,

And some of the haters like to call me a fanatic

Well, maybe I am, but that's not a bad thing

I mean, every fandom's got their own crazy celebrities

 

Not that I'm famous or anything like that

I'm just a normal guy with pony shirts and a brony hat

I'm crazy for the fan music, got a huge amount

Like YAC, Mic, and add Tomb to the count

 

Well, maybe you think I'm just a One Trick Pony

But I'll let you all know that I ain't no phony

If you're a brony like me, come along for the ride,

And see amazing stuff that'll leave you Petrified

 

Got an order for Guncakes, hope that's coming soon

But just got to be careful, or get banished to the moon

I try not to hate, when the haters are brats,

I just yell at them just like I'm Yelling At Cats

 

[Chorus]

Brony, if I go to hell but you get to Equestria,

Just get me to the castle and I'll talk to Celestia

Made up my mind, I'm a brony all the way 'til I die

And even after death I want ponies for the afterlife

 

Brony, if I go to hell but you get to Equestria,

Just get me to the castle and I'll talk to Celestia

Made up my mind, I'm a brony all the way 'til I die

And even after death I want ponies for the afterlife

 

[Verse 3]

I'm off, finding Twilight Sparkle is now my mission

So let that [Censored] know he's got competition

And tell [Censored] I'll keep this beef on forever,

And to teach him, I'll take [Censored] so he remembers

 

A disgrace to the fandom, he is, simple and plain

This sucker's the reason that bronies have a bad name

Yeah, you married your toy, but it's twenty-fifteen now, b*tch

No one gives a f*ck about your [Censored] bullsh*t

 

And now I'll let him have it, with these lyrics of mine

Someone needs to teach him that what he's doing ain't fine

Bronies leaving the fandom, people wonder why this is

I'll tell you why, it's because of motherf*ckers like this

 

I may not be good at rap, but I'm not afraid to try

I can be just like that, just like Fluttershy

So to all the people in the fandom of ponies,

I'm on a mission, the survival of the bronies

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,824]

It's pretty good. However, your lyrics roll off as quite cheesy, because you're telling a little too much. Perhaps one of the most important rules of lyric writing is to show and not tell. Other than that, very well done. 

[Jest (Inactive) 875]

The lyrics and the quality of rapping are pretty good, the music audio and the audio in general sounds low quality and chopping though which kills it a little </3