I would love you have a fresh set of eyes take a look at my fic

[Eavath 278]

Since its original conception, I've been working on it for ~5 months now. I had a small writers block, though, starting chapter 2, so it was put on hold until I got over it.

 

I'm not sure how often this part of the forums is looked at, but I'd absolutely love it if I could get someone new to take a quick read of at least chapter one, and possibly throw some suggestions in my direction. It's currently unnamed as of yet. Mainly because I have no idea what to call it .-.

 

Here's the drive link to it, in case anyone happens to be curious >.<

 

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hwPz0OGp7GUppjbE5AFiM-qBTwFG9r7EL9fGfY3l2HA/edit

 

Thank you in advance if you read through it (Chapter one is only ~3k words)

[Rainbow Skywalker 642]

Nice concept, does have a few grammar mistakes here and there as well as format errors (thoughts are typically italicized), but other than that it's pretty neat.