Slice0Pie 815 August 28, 2013 Share August 28, 2013 I remade it since the other drawing I made was clearly crap. Anyway, if you didn't know, this is Dripping Dream, my OC. She is grumpy, usually stressed, lonely, quiet, and sometimes, insane. Her Cutie Mark is a heart with black paint dripping on it from a brush. Working on backstory. Enjoy, I guess... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slice0Pie 815 August 28, 2013 Author Share August 28, 2013 Critiquing time. Again. *puts on monocle and top hat* The ear is improved. All you need to do now is make it a bit taller. The mane is better as well, but it isn't very smooth. There are some lines which need to be smoothed out, such as the one at the bottom of the mane. The face is much better. The back part of the head should be a little rounder, and the front part above the muzzle should be too. The muzzle is, again, much better. The tip of the muzzle needs to be a bit pointier, and the bottom line needs to cut into the neck. The neck should be much shorter. Her back should curve a bit rather than being a straight line. The wings are done incorrectly. They should be brought down to the center of the stomach. They should also be shortened a bit. The front left leg is too fat. Slim it down a bit. The front right leg should be a bit slimmer, and not curved in the middle. The back left flank line should connect with the back line. The back left leg should be thinner and slimmer. This goes for all the legs. The flank should cut into the back left leg. The tail should come out of the flank. It's a bit better, but part of the tail is coming out of the back left leg, and that's a no-no. Make the tail curve back up into the flank rather than going straight. Your lines are very jagged and need to be thickened and straightened. I listened to what you said. I changed the muzzle, ear, tail, mane, legs, made them slimmer, well, skinny, tried making the lines seem more smooth, so, what do you think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Slice0Pie 815 August 28, 2013 Author Share August 28, 2013 @, You're getting a bit better with each drawing, but you just don't seem to be hitting the nail on the head. I can't really provide more outside of what I've said. However, compare your drawing to this image. It'll help you see how ponies work. What.... you are showing me right now... made my day. Pure gold Friendship is magic. What I am saying is, this is going to help me with future PMV's I am working on, hand animated, and this is going to help me with just drawing. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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