First comission! :D ''Someday I'll be just like you Twilight''

[Bugplayer 720]

Hi there!

 

I think it's the first time I've been this short between 2 drawings, which is a good sign!

 

This is a commission I made for someone on Deviant art, and also like I said in the title, my FIRST commission 

 

I had a lot of fun working in it. And I'm getting more and more comfortable with shading each time :3

 

Onward to art!

 

Source: http://bugplayer.deviantart.com/art/Someday-I-ll-be-just-like-you-Twilight-414830644

 

I would like to know if there's something that could be improved. Anything! So that I'll take note and get better 

[Demirari 454]

Oh wow, that is kind of sad. Nice job on the drawing. I mean 5+ standard for it! The only thing that bugs me are the eyes. Donno why, but they seem to bug me.

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Edited November 22, 2013 by Demirari

[Bugplayer 720]

Oh wow, that is kind of sad. Nice job on the drawing. I mean 5+ standard for it! The only compliment I have are the eyes. Domino why, but they seem to bug me.

 

Sorry for the late reply!

But yeah, her eyes does look weird a little bit. It's probably because I didn't extended her eye lid to the bottom of her eyes, which I should have 

 

Other than that, I'm happy it please you

[Batbrony 16,087]

As for the pic itself, there's nothing that I can think of that needs improvement, it looks great as far as I can tell.  Maybe a description though?  I know the pic's got the title and all, but I'm not exactly sure what Trixie's doing here.  Pic descriptions are always a nice touch, since they help the pic tell whatever little story it's trying to, enhancing the overall final product in my opinion.