[somewhat Urgent] Need critique on a film script

[Gay Bird 421]

So my school has an annual film festival, and I have to have it done by march 3rd, so I have very little time to shoot and edit due to my procrastination. Also, I had to rush through the writing of the script. Anyway, here's a link.

 

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1zHpg_jhJPKbp0-80I5uD0_wu3yPixwhNZcpKeX9i338/edit?usp=sharing

 

I would like any critique, ideas, changes, even typos you notice. Be as critical as you want. I'm going to shoot very soon, and I don't want to be showing a bad script to my actors. Thanks in advance!

 

(yeah it's not pony related, but this is the best place I could find to get help on this.)

[GameytheGeemer 147]

I'd say that it's somewhat rushed (I'm not faulting it for that, the pacing just seems wonky to me) and a good deal of the dialogue is really stiff.

 

All and all, I'd give it an 7/10. Could be better, but it's not terrible.