Yeah I have these at times, I never write them though, so this time I sat down shut up and wrote it down, grammar and spelling sucks since its well, a rant!

It is based on the story problems, character development and the characters I used, also my thoughts on common story telling and what I hate about some of them, enjoy

I went for a walk this morning to try and get ideas for my story, fill in all the little nit picking gaps so I can release the first chapter, even though that this is the final version, I still sit here feeling like it was the first, at least I know the direction of the story eh? but still I did come up with some ideas, but music was sidetracking me, ripped my headphones out of my phone at that point to have my thoughts to myself, and I kept dealing with the same problem when I thought about it, why should we care for the characters, I kinda feel I've just gone, BOOP here is a character, try and connect please NO damnit, I do not want to go about like that, its terrible story telling at the very least so I feel like I should put aside some of the time taking scenes to allow for better development, get to know the characters and feel connected and invested, but thats hard when we have a exiled samurai, a ghost pony and a pony who lives in a winter wonderland, then again, hat odd combo might make the story more fun, I would not say like a super hero story, I do not like that style when trying to amke epics, unless its by Nolan still, I want to talk about the action parts now, and how I've changed them about too, I've realised that a lot of the action scenes stick the focus to one character per scene, and they seem very spuratic, no real hinting that its happening. so I might work on that more but its during Discords rule of Equestria, I can make it random as fuck, I even had the idea of making the farm crops uproot and run off, leaving ponies hungry! whats wrong with me hahaha. I have the biggest trouble when dealing with character relationships mainly, I do not wan't them to be the common fodder, I do not want to have two characters get together just because they are opposite gender and have a large role in the story, I think that is a pet peeve for most readers as well, so I'm glad I'm edging myself away from that bollocks, so both the characters in this story will not be getting together with the others, I might do some hints towards a relationship, but I will pull the rug from under you to show you how predicable this stuff is, it could be a funny crack at the commom media and their storytelling methods, feeling that everyone has to find someone before the story wraps up, maybe this is why I like finding nemo so much, since they never got together, I hope finding dory keeps this in mind when that comes out. where was I. OH YEAH, I also have concerns with the ending, I won't tell you because spoilers, I do not want to punish people who liked me enough to read all of this in one day but its not a typical ending, there are still questions to be asked and such I don't feel like it is satisfying, but reality never is, I am acturaly considering to while end current story arcs, hint at more incase a sequel is ever wanted, deal wityh other fun periods in their history like Luna's uprising and banishment .

Moving on I've realised that there are only 3 Cannon characters in this story, Celestia Luna and Discord, everyone else are either OC's or characters I made for the plot, some I might develop more such as Eice and Princess Necra but I don't know yet, Incase you are wondering Eice is Hyper's brother in arms and Princess Necra is the ruler of the afterworld. You know what, I'll share that story with you. princess Necra is the first Alicorn to die, doing so she became the ruler over the afterlife, or afterworld as its called, those who pass on are sent here in spirit and they acn live out normal lives, some don't realise their death ever, no one ages and no one can suffer, except those of great evil, Necra herself is very unusual, lot less direct minded comapred to the other alicorns or princesses in the living world, she has a bigger thing for action and combat, doing so she takes an interest in some of the greatest fighters, and those not hesitant to take a life for the benifit of others, so people like Hyper and Eice fall into her good books, I just hope she does not try anything when they do die.

Now I forget my standing, since thats happened I will stop here, sigh, I really should have used this keyboard time to write more story, I can do that now, CYA