How I became Equestrian, better version

[gamecubeguy214 2,512]

I made a fanfiction about me becoming an Equestrian. Not a lot of people like it. One said it was too fast paced. If you want to read the original, here. https://mlpforums.com/topic/121328-how-i-became-equestrian/ I am going to slow the story down and add paragraphs, to make it easier to read and add a bit more detail. I also changed it a little to make the story a bit more interesting. Let's start.

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I was on the couch, watching Family Feud. A bit into the episode, there was a warning message. It said, ''An asteroid is coming in from another universe. It's coming in at about 1,000,000,000 light years per second. It's headed for Earth. The entire planet is in danger.'' I thought, ''Like that's ever gonna happen. They can't predict something from another universe with the technology we have today.'' I kept enjoying myself, watching Family Feud, not worried about the emergency that the TV is talking about. But then it happened.

 

The asteroid crashed. There's a hole in planet Earth. I thought I was dead. But then I realized that I'm alive, and I'm quite surprised. Even though I was still alive, I was in danger. I was headed straight for a star at an extremely high speed. Luckily, I'm quite skilled at using my arms and legs to move myself through a place where gravity doesn't effect me much. Or you can just all it swimming. I ''swam'' through space, avoiding the stars quite skillfully. But now I'm about to die. You can't breathe in space, no matter how hard you try. Just when my heart nearly stopped beating, I landing on some solid, but soft object. I'm safe.

 

The feeling of soft cotton. The sight of space. The sound of beautiful music. The smell of something pleasant, but unknown. The taste of the last thing I ate. It was amazing. I loved it. I came into realization that I was still in danger. There was no food, water, or anything to have fun with. I was going to die here. I thought I was, until Celestia was there. She looked at me angrily and said, ''You're another one of those humans who hate ponies. It's time to die.'' I was surprised and scared. For some reason, she had a chainsaw. I was even more scared when she had that, because if I were to die, I would want to die of old age. The chainsaw was an inch away from me, when I said, ''Wait.'' Right when the spinning chainsaw made slight contact with me and I was bleeding, she surprisingly listened. ''I like ponies.'' I said. ''Then what's my name?'' She asked. I replied, ''Celestia, of course.'' She suddenly treated me friendly. She wanted me to become a pony on planet Equestria, and she started preparing me for being a pony. She told me to pick a color for my pony. I picked a green color in the middle of bright and dark. She told me to draw my cutie mark with magical paper and crayons. I drew PAC-MAN. Since I'm not perfect at drawing, she made it perfect. She asked me what kind of pony I wanted to be. I said, ''Unicorn.'' She asked where I wanted to live. ''Ponyville,'' I said. Finally, she determined the gender my pony version will be. ''Male or female?'' she wondered. She looked down my pants. ''Male.'' She used her magic and put me in this dark area.

 

I can't see, hear, smell, feel, or taste anything. All I could do was think. I thought, ''This isn't even Equestria. I'm in a void. My chest glows white. It starts to come out of it. The glow opens a door to Ponyville. I'm finally mobile. I walk in. The opening disappears and I'm finally in Equestria. Everypony is hanging out with each other. I'm still a human, though. They're all happy and they're having fun until they see me. They all wonder, ''What the heck is that?'' Some say that I'm an alien, others think I'm an undiscovered creature, especially Fluttershy. Twilight hears all this ''What is this mysterious creature'' crap that everyone's saying. She comes out and sees me. She says, ''That creature looks familiar to me. I'm gonna go read about this.'' She opens a book about mythical creatures titled, ''Unseen Mythical Creatures'' She flips through the pages and finds a page with a mythical creature called, ''The human.'' She reads and finds tons of information that could be useful about humans. She reads, ''If you find one that likes the pony world, you are extremely lucky.'' She runs back out. She finds a microphone and says, ''This creature is a human. They seem to be considered mythical. Most of these don't seem to like the world of the ponies, so beware!'' I say, ''I like ponies. I love them. They're awesome.'' Twilight says, ''We'll believe him for now, but if he starts purposely destroying things in Equestria, let me know so that we can put him in our torture device.'' After all that talking from Twilight, I try and meet everypony there, especially the Mane Six.

 

The pony that I first tried to meet was Twilight. We had a conversation about our interests and stuff. I told her about my interest in PAC-MAN. She said that she loved PAC-MAN. Instant friends. She had an Xbox 360 and it had PAC-MAN on it. We played turn taking multiplayer for an hour or two. Very fun. I then went to Pinkie to make friends with her. All I really expected was a hi, a conversation, and a brohoof. However, she went into some giant house and threw a giant party with everyone in Ponyville. The Mane Six went there while I was walking there. The party was quite fun, it was all about PAC-MAN, and they had me open presents. It was like a birthday party, except no, it's a welcome to the planet party. One present was from Pinkie, a Wii U. How did she have the money to get a Wii U? One was Smash Bros Wii U. Now I have the two things I need to survive. I'm exaggerating, of course. Another was a capture card, computer, and internet. All the things I want. After opening all that stuff, they all grabbed seats and gave me one. They all were sitting behind me, while I was the one in front. They put on a TV, and they had a device that records footage of a PAC-MAN arcade machine that happened to be there. I didn't even need any bits to play it. I turned on the machine and I went the same route I always go in the beginning of a PAC-MAN game. I played it and everypony was impressed with how good I played. But then I heard a yawn. Everypony else yawned, and I yawned, of course, because yawning is contagious. Everyone was tired, including Pinkie. I wanted to meet the rest of he Mane Six, but I was too tired, any they were going to sleep. Everyone but me was going to sleep, because I had no place to do it. No place except the ground. Lying down, cold and tired. Before I fell asleep, the glow came out of my chest again. I thought, ''Am I going back to the void?'' But no. I turned into a pony. The green pony with a horn and a PAC-MAN cutie mark.

 

The lights in everyone's houses turned on. They wondered where it was coming from. It was coming from outside. They see a new pony. They know it's me because of my cutie mark. They all congratulate me. I said, ''Go back into your houses, it's time to go to bed. I'm gonna build myself a house tomorrow, I have to get the rest to do so. Twilight asks, ''Why are you sleeping outside?'' I answer, ''Because I have no bed.'' ''If you say so'' she says. They head to their houses. I'm out here. Cold and tired. But I have to get my sleep or I won't be able to build a good house.

 

The morning that I wake up, I surprisingly feel refreshed and good after that sleep. I ask Applejack if I can cut down a few of her trees. She says I can. I get 16 logs, and then I turn them into 64 wooden planks. I some of them into 40 sticks. I make a pickaxe out of the planks and sticks, and I dig down, getting 17 stones, to make a stone pickaxe, spade, axe, sword and furnace. Now I have a mining tool, digging tool, cutting tool, a weapon for safety, and a way to cook food. The next thing I have to do is find some animals to kill for food source, but I don't want to make Fluttershy sad. Instead, I rely on Applejack's apples, which is pretty good. I head to Fluttershy's place, to see if she has any sheep. She does, so I ask her if I can have some of the wool to make a bed. She hands me some shears. I took that as a yes, so I went and sheared sheep until I got the pieces of wool. I then made a bed with the wooden planks I had and the wool I got from the sheep. I had saplings from Applejack's trees, so I planted the saplings and waited for the trees to grow. I then got the wood I didn't need permission to cut, and then I made more wooden planks, enough to build a house. I started working. I made my house 10x10. I worked on the border, build the floor, and made the walls and roof. My house was complete. All I needed to do was place my table, so that I could make more things, my furnace, so that I can cook any food that I find, and bed, so I can sleep. I went to sleep, and my bed was so much more comfy than when I slept outside last night.

 

The next day, I made a chest to store some things. I then went outside to cut down the trees I planted. I now have enough wood to go underground. I mined down to Equestria's source of lava. It's quite dangerous down there. Using the cobblestone I had, I build bridges across the lava, and it worked pretty well. I saw a cave and headed in. There was iron ore. I made a furnace to cook it. I then mined the iron and cooked it. I'm sitting in front of the furnace, waiting. Finally, three ingots are ready for a pickaxe. I then go through the cave, finding lots of gold. I can use this to buy things. I found some diamonds too, and I can give some to Rarity and I can keeps some to make tools and armor. I'm good now I go back up to my house, with diamonds and gold. I give half my diamonds to rarity, keep half for myself, and cook the gold ore to make ingots, and now I can turn each ingot into nine bits. I have some iron I can use for tools and armor. I make the tools and armor, but I don't wear the armor unless there's some attack or I'm trying to save somepony, because Equestria seems to be usually peaceful, unlike the planet Earth that I use to live on. I have a few diamonds, I can use that to make a diamond pickaxe, and I'll mine obsidian. I'll do that. I go underground and find obsidian. I mine ten, which is enough to make the portal to Hell.

 

I light my portal. It's lit. I head in there. I'm now in another void, but now I'm in Hell. Dead pig people, fireball shooting ghosts, cubes made of magma, and yellow thing shooting small fireballs. I'm in Hell. I kill some of those yellow things, and I get their sticks. They seem to turn into powder. I think the powder could be more useful. I'm scared, so I go back to Equestria. It's nighttime, but I'm still not tired. I go outside, when I see that there's a tall, black creature that can teleport. It seems hostile, so I attack it. I hit it, but it keeps teleporting behind me. It's very hard to kill. Once it's dead, it dropped this pearl. I wondered, ''What if I put this with the powder?'' I dot that, and I get this eye. I find multiple of these black creatures, and they keep dropping the pearls. I keep making those eyes. I start trying to find a way that these eyes have a use. I tried eating it, and it tastes disgusting. I think, ''What if it's some toy?'' I throw it, and now it's in the air. I think I supposed to follow it. I keep throwing it and throwing it, until on went down. I tried digging down, until I fell into this area. I think I'm supposed to be here. I keep walking through the area. It's like a maze. There's these gray things coming after me and attacking me. I finally found this room with this thing that looks a bit like another portal. I try to light it, but it doesn't work. I put the eyes in, and it works. I jump in, why not? But then there's this place, filled with those black creatures and a dragon. I attack it whenever it comes to me, but I seems to keep healing. I notice than whenever the white stuff from those crystals touches the dragon, it heals. I make ladders to destroy them, be they keep exploding, but it works. The dragon can no longer heal, and I attacking until he's down. When he's dead, the portal comes back. I walk in it, and now I back in Equestria. I beat the dragon that seemed to be controlling those black creatures. Wait a second, I did all that from curiosity and wanting to see what Hell is like. I just went underground for gold that I can use to buy things. Now I ended up killing a dragon. Well, whatever. It was quite fun, anyway. I bet everypony wonders where I've been. I head to Pinkie's house. She says, ''Hi, Gamecubeguy! Haven't seen you in a really long time!'' I replied, ''Yea, I missed you guys. I was going underground for some gold.'' Pinkie says, ''Oh, really? Sounds fun.'' ''Yeah, I'll say it was quite fun, but very dangerous.'' And the conversation goes on.

 

I meet so many other ponies any enjoy my life as a pony. I read one of Twilight's books on magic and how to use it, because I wanted to know how to use magic. I hang out with the ponies so much that we get called the Mane Seven. My time in Equestria has been extremely fun, a lot more fun than when I live on Earth. On Earth, we had chores and humans. But here, we have talking ponies, which I still find pretty cool after living here for a few days. Equestria is such a fun place. If you can, you should visit.