critique wanted OC Bio, thoughts/opinions?

[Kafooku 156]

Hey doodbros, so I recently just created my OC's background in a journal-type style. I was wondering what parts I could work on (in terms of story and grammar). Also, it's the first time for me writing something like this that wasn't for academic purposes, so sorry if a lot of parts are jumbled and confusing.

 

Link can be found here.

 

Thanks!