critique wanted The Watchover

[Rainbowknuckles 31]

Hello everypony, check out my non-MLP story I've made. In this story, Orko from the 2002 He Man series agrees to take care of a pampered baby lioness cub named Furaha while her rich parents are out. The two have fun playing together, but when it's bedtime, Orko finds a way to protect and comfort his friend in the gentlest way possible. Here, have a read!

The Watchover.pdf