critique wanted The Stallion Cub

[Rainbowknuckles 31]

Have you ponies heard of my latest non-MLP story idea, The Stallion Cub? In it, characters from the 2002 He Man series abandons one of their own, Orko, in the desert, until a lioness cub coloured much like Spirit the stallion appears. She frees him, and the two soon become friends, embarking on a free-spirited desert adventure exploring the boundaryless surroundings of the world of sand. What do you think?

Edited June 20, 2024 by Rainbowknuckles

[Luna the Great of all the Russias 2,986]

Hello. As this thread is for discussing non-MLP related fiction writing, it has been moved to the Non-Pony Art & Creations section.