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Yet another line-work experiments


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There are things in both pictures that bugs me. Second picture poses a greater problem however; as soon as I went out of my comfort zone I've made mistakes. Oh well, least it looked better in sketches.

 

...enjoy, I think. Constructive criticism is always welcomed.

 

Edit: By the way, is censored... swearing allowed in this board?

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Sure, I see swearing from time to time in these forums and haven't seen much complaint, though I think it's frowned upon by some members. If it's part of the art, don't worry too much about that. If it belongs in the pic, the critiques of the people here on the forums could help you with that decision making change.

 

As for you pictures, I prefer the second over the first. On the first image, the head shape is, well, shaped to look like a male pony from the show over the females. To fix, just have the front end rounded instead of flattened as is. Plus, it almost appears like there is no body, you might want to see what stretching that out would look like. And finally, the horn feels like it's a bit too long, see how shrinking it down looks. A nice image of the Parasprite by the way, though the flag could use a little more work to help with making it appear like it's flapping in movement with the Parasprite's movements.

 

The second one....I can't find anything to say on it really. It's actually a very nice piece. Just have a complaint on the background color, it's very plain for a gal like Rarity; maybe a gradient tone of her colors but sharper and darker looking would've helped?

 

Sorta wish I could've seen how the unedited version looks on the second one.

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Sure, I see swearing from time to time in these forums and haven't seen much complaint, though I think it's frowned upon by some members. If it's part of the art, don't worry too much about that. If it belongs in the pic, the critiques of the people here on the forums could help you with that decision making change.

 

As for you pictures, I prefer the second over the first. On the first image, the head shape is, well, shaped to look like a male pony from the show over the females. To fix, just have the front end rounded instead of flattened as is. Plus, it almost appears like there is no body, you might want to see what stretching that out would look like. And finally, the horn feels like it's a bit too long, see how shrinking it down looks. A nice image of the Parasprite by the way, though the flag could use a little more work to help with making it appear like it's flapping in movement with the Parasprite's movements.

 

The second one....I can't find anything to say on it really. It's actually a very nice piece. Just have a complaint on the background color, it's very plain for a gal like Rarity; maybe a gradient tone of her colors but sharper and darker looking would've helped?

 

Sorta wish I could've seen how the unedited version looks on the second one.

 

I am considering of turning into a vector form; the backgrounds are in that way because that's the default tone I use to do any line-work. I'm still in a process of finding that sweet spot with my style.

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