Requested pic to be critiqued

[FortyShadows 217]

This is my first attempt so please tell me how to improve

Edited November 28, 2019 by FortyShadows
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[Finesthour 7,287]

My critique:

• This is a chibi drawing.
• Their heads are way too big for the small bodies you drew, they look like children.
• The blushing lines are very odd, never seen that efore.
• The left ponies eye looks odd, like she is ever seeing.
• Her hair is good.
• Guessing the one on the right is lurry?
• His headphones look ok.
• His wings are good.
• Both hooves aren't round enough.
• Lurry's forehead is way too big.
• Both of their flanks get way too small.
• Lurry's backleg looks like it ate a section of his flank.
• The legs do not look like hooves at all.
• Lurry is missing the tail hairlines.

Adequate.

3/5

[Shankveld 4,949]

Both of their flanks get way too small.

 

Crona demands larger flanks!!

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[Finesthour 7,287]

Crona demands larger flanks!!

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I like big butts, I cannot deny.

You other shanks can't deny.

Edited July 15, 2012 by Crona The Critic

[PonyEcho 1,610]

the arm/hoofs ar good but the legs are alittle off also vynils left leg just dissapears.

the heads seem a little too big compeared to the rest of the body and it doesn't look like there kissing just bashing snouts.

the one on ther rights line for the closed eye should be a bit lower.

i wont say much else cos my thread would be a copy of Crona's.

2.5/5

Edited July 15, 2012 by PonyEcho

[FortyShadows 217]

On 7/15/2012 at 11:18 AM, 'Crona The Critic' said:

-critique-

 

On 7/15/2012 at 12:32 PM, 'PonyEcho' said:

-moar critique-

 

Alright, some parts are fixed now.

Edited November 28, 2019 by FortyShadows

[Pix3M 607]

Consider using references, if you want show-accurate art.

[FortyShadows 217]

On 7/16/2012 at 9:57 AM, 'PixMeister' said:

Consider using references, if you want show-accurate art.

 

I used a few for this one.

Edited November 28, 2019 by FortyShadows

[Pix3M 607]

I used a few for this one. Character ref, not pose ref. X3

As for show-acc. I guess I don't draw show-acc anymore. (see above post by me, yay!)

 

In that case, I suggest going for head proportions that are not so 'tall', but go for much circular ones. Round and fat = cute. You could also experiment with fatter, rounder, or stubbier legs that are less elongated as they're long and skinny enough that I couldn't tell that you were aiming for a cute chibi look. The ears could also be stretched lower and farther back as show-accurate ears are more rounded.

[FortyShadows 217]

Just means that it's my way of drawing

Edited November 28, 2019 by FortyShadows