[Work in Progress] Morning Conversation b/t OC and Rarity

[Phaeston-e12 173]

Okay, I'm still bit far from doing anything serious since I realized how hard it actually is to draw things consistently. I spent few hours trying to make them look consistent but even using the same under-sketches they all turned out too different from another; so I ended up using the same sketch for multiple cuts as you see.

 

This is something I will have to work on and practice in the future. However I'm still not done with this experiment.

 

 

Regardless, I Colored the first few panels and added a placeholder background for temporary purposes... well it was also an experiment.

I still have few more cuts to make and backgrounds to think about. This may take maybe couple days I hope.

 

What do you think of the line-work? I added some noise into the brush and it's bit closer to the style I've been after. I am not really that happy with Rarity's eye on the fourth cut, I tried to make it intentionally big for an emphasis purpose but I came to realization that enlarging her pupil would've worked the same; I may re-do that part when I'm working on the last few panels.

 

PS: I still can't find a way to make eyes look more natural, think it's a style-problem but I'm hoping to be able to make it more realistic in the future.

[Hazardus_Havard. 479]

Wait a second, I actually recognize this art style from you. I had to look up your name to realize you posted art here a while ago. Congrats on that, it's hard to have an identifiable image that retains to art. I still believe that the snouts on the female ponies should be rounded, but go with what you like.

 

This intrigues me though. I love a good comic and this is well drawn out. Hope this turns out into an actual series and not one of those one panel types of comics.

[Phaeston-e12 173]

Wait a second, I actually recognize this art style from you. I had to look up your name to realize you posted art here a while ago. Congrats on that, it's hard to have an identifiable image that retains to art. I still believe that the snouts on the female ponies should be rounded, but go with what you like.

 

This intrigues me though. I love a good comic and this is well drawn out. Hope this turns out into an actual series and not one of those one panel types of comics.

 

Well this is the first multiple panels I've done; I've restricted myself to just doing rectangular blocks because I am still very inexperienced and there are numerous areas where I really need to improve. I'm consistently challenging myself to something much more difficult and that's the only way I can get better.

 

I would use rounded out snouts on other female ponies, but those two ponies I've been practicing have Fleur-de-lis-esque bodies and faces; (well Rarity in my own setting) that's pretty much why.

Edited July 16, 2012 by ein12

[Pix3M 607]

Rarity's eye outline is kind of like a line with a half-circle line on top. I believe that shape is rather unnatural for an eye even among other cartooning styles I've seen so far, which might be why you might find it unnatural... that is if that's the eye you find to be unnatural.

 

How about instead of having a half-circle for the shape of the eye, what if we take the right-most "point" from the line and half-circles and move it upwards, creating a shape that is more show-accurate? Eh, not sure if that's the best suggestion possible.

Edited July 16, 2012 by PixMeister

[Hazardus_Havard. 479]

Well this is the first multiple panels I've done; I've restricted myself to just doing rectangular blocks because I am still very inexperienced and there are numerous areas where I really need to improve. I'm consistently challenging myself to something much more difficult and that's the only way I can get better.

 

I would use rounded out snouts on other female ponies, but those two ponies I've been practicing have Fleur-de-lis-esque bodies and faces; (well Rarity in my own setting) that's pretty much why.

 

That's understandable for the faces. I looked at the image again and noticed that the older pony has, what I'm assuming, a very shortened forearm and it looks a tad strange.

 

I can understand having to challenge oneself to get better as well. I myself am currently working on an animation with acceptance from a Brony musician; god will this be difficult. Hoping to see more of this comic.

[Phaeston-e12 173]

That's understandable for the faces. I looked at the image again and noticed that the older pony has, what I'm assuming, a very shortened forearm and it looks a tad strange.

 

I can understand having to challenge oneself to get better as well. I myself am currently working on an animation with acceptance from a Brony musician; god will this be difficult. Hoping to see more of this comic.

 

That's an interesting observation you've made. Theoretically the forearm is supposed to be anatomically correct (based on the proportion set I've made during my character development phase) because her body is not really facing directly toward the paper stand, but even with the proportion check I've made, because of that clothing and the way her body is cropped out; it really makes her foreleg strange looking.

[Hazardus_Havard. 479]

That's an interesting observation you've made. Theoretically the forearm is supposed to be anatomically correct (based on the proportion set I've made during my character development phase) because her body is not really facing directly toward the paper stand, but even with the proportion check I've made, because of that clothing and the way her body is cropped out; it really makes her foreleg strange looking.

 

Yeah, I can see where that might be true. I've seen that happen in other works, my own included. Still have trouble with it from time to time, like my last Illustration was supposed to be Sailor Mars, for a friend, and it kept bugging me so much I placed that to the side for now.

 

Oh, last thing I just felt I needed to point out. The old one's horn looks very long for a unicorn pony; unless you have an interesting story to go along with it's length?

[Phaeston-e12 173]

Yeah, I can see where that might be true. I've seen that happen in other works, my own included. Still have trouble with it from time to time, like my last Illustration was supposed to be Sailor Mars, for a friend, and it kept bugging me so much I placed that to the side for now.

 

Oh, last thing I just felt I needed to point out. The old one's horn looks very long for a unicorn pony; unless you have an interesting story to go along with it's length?

 

I've pretty much finished out 80% of the synopsis; bar few logical problems that's been bugging me. Problem is I have no idea if it will be feasible to do this as a comic due to my lack of time (in few months) and drawing skill. So I'm concentrating most of my time getting my drawing skill leveled up as much as I can; which I think is really affecting my health right now.

 

Edit: Oh and also I'm hesitant to talk much about it because of some factors with her character that people may find it disagreeable. (not in a distasteful way)

Edited July 16, 2012 by ein12

[AIMonkey 197]

Can definitely see you're trying to hit the same style throughout your works, and I'm familiar with the challenge it brings

Not sure in what area you think it needs work and how you achieve it (since you also used the same sketch as base), But for me personally when I try to stay consistent (in the same character that is) I try to define the spacing of key elements, like the eyes, ears, mouth and their size. Basically making some (rough) guidelines.

You used the same body for your main character, so not much to tell about that, But I did notice in the first 2 panels, the eye seems to change shape. Most notable because of the distance from the front headline.

Since the remaining panels are more like the 2nd I'll say that it's the 1st panel eye that seems off. The top needs to go back into her head more

 

Anyhow, before I start ranting too much, I've a slight similar approach to things, making it difficult with experiments instead of easy. (It can be even harder when trying to stay consistent )

The risk of having something look "wrong" seems simply higher when experimenting. So when needed that's why I try to find and create guides I want to keep consistent throughout the style. Especially with fundamental things I think it's important, other aspects can be played around (see the neck length in MLP, that seems to change from time to time )

[Hazardus_Havard. 479]

I've pretty much finished out 80% of the synopsis; bar few logical problems that's been bugging me. Problem is I have no idea if it will be feasible to do this as a comic due to my lack of time (in few months) and drawing skill. So I'm concentrating most of my time getting my drawing skill leveled up as much as I can; which I think is really affecting my health right now.

 

Edit: Oh and also I'm hesitant to talk much about it because of some factors with her character that people may find it disagreeable. (not in a distasteful way)

 

I should probably get some more exercise and sun myself, spending most of my day either studying or working on art studies. As for the discernible character traits, that's exactly what makes a good story line. Having characters WITH character, a personality, a background that speaks much of the figure in question. I myself have read some really strange works, some I am even worried to acknowledge as to reading and enjoying to friends and family (Pinkameena being a prime example) So don't feel to worried about what others may say or think. I guess all that ultimately matters is what you think. Just target your stuff to an audience you feel will best like your work.

[Phaeston-e12 173]

I should probably get some more exercise and sun myself, spending most of my day either studying or working on art studies. As for the discernible character traits, that's exactly what makes a good story line. Having characters WITH character, a personality, a background that speaks much of the figure in question. I myself have read some really strange works, some I am even worried to acknowledge as to reading and enjoying to friends and family (Pinkameena being a prime example) So don't feel to worried about what others may say or think. I guess all that ultimately matters is what you think. Just target your stuff to an audience you feel will best like your work.

 

Well, my main concern is whether or not a duex ex machima factor will negatively impact the overall integrity of what I'm trying to do; regardless of how complex her character actually may be.