DitzyDooOnline 20 September 29, 2012 Share September 29, 2012 First of all my apology if this isn't the correct section. Okay then. I had it for a while, and I never posted this anywhere. Anyways i really haven't created a story for her soo... yea. http://mlpforums.com/public/style_emoticons/default/dry.png Her name is Blossom (best i can think of) Shes a unicorn Shes lazy, but intelligent Her occupation is a student studying her basic stuff She's generic http://mlpforums.com/public/style_emoticons/default/dry.png She needs a cutie mark ._. She's a work in progress So the point of me posting this to get what you think of her, so I appreciate your criticism. Once again she is a work in progress. Add Me on Steam if you want. [NLR] Octavia™ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hazardus_Havard. 479 September 29, 2012 Share September 29, 2012 Well if it's for a fic on a story about her you should at least write down some ideas you have on it so people can better criticize on both the figure and the story to the figure in question. Cause right now, it's more or less just criticizing what I aim to believe came from a pony creator and, well, there's not much to criticize on those things if ever. Having it for a fic, yeah I can see the creator's use there for quick images though I've always preferred it when people go out of their ways to draw the pictures themselves. As for what you have right now, the what I'm going to assume is a very strange leotard on her doesn't match her 'lazy' persona as most people connect those usually with working out in some form and lazy people don't work out usually. Also just to point this out, most ponies don't usually wear clothes. Accessories, sure, but ponies that do wear them are either in some sort of event, or connotes as the upper class, rich./royal. Practice makes perfect; but if nobody's perfect, why practice? http://hazardus-havard.deviantart.com/ Art http://www.fimfiction.net/story/70801/an-alien-walks-amongst-us Story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ashbad 969 September 29, 2012 Share September 29, 2012 The "story", as you convery it, is by leagues the most crucial component of an original character. The form of a being is secondary in significance, as it does not portray the distinguishing aspects of the character -- philosophies, passions, interests, memories, hamartiae, and so forth. Physical appearance is figuratively and literally skin-deep -- would you detest being characterized by your external appearance and primitive descriptive words such as "lazy" and "intelligent", rather asking to be defined by substance of a deeper value? The answer to that question is what any sentient character would say; unless your character lacks sentience and humanity, you should consider pouring detail into a better-suited description. What has fanfiction has Ashbad written lately? We should totally find out by clicking this link. (Protip, turn on "Show Mature" to see more) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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