derpy mail ad

[Luna317 43]

i have made a derpy mail ad as you can see above. please tell me how you think. how to improve it or other pony ads i should make! thank you~Luna317 ( i fixed the spelling!  :3 )  

Edited March 10, 2013 by Luna317

[MelancholicMemory 2,027]

I like it, and I think it's funny, but you really should proofread these things first. You spelled "our" and "muffin" wrong, and that kind of takes away from the overall effect of the ad.

[Sentienthydra 52]

Not that I'm a design artist, but you should add a big/little picture of the offered muffin, but to keep with the 'Derp' style, put it as a (remarkably well made) crayon drawing of a muffin, perhaps drawn on next to a large blocky arrow

[Display Name 448]

This looks fantastic! I mean i'd probably use it!

But, the spelling errors are a deal-breaker for me.

But it shouldn't be a problem fixing those! /)

[Luna317 43]

This looks fantastic! I mean i'd probably use it!

But, the spelling errors are a deal-breaker for me.

But it shouldn't be a problem fixing those! /)

i already fixed the errors thanks for the feed back! if there is any more problems! thanks once again!. ~Luna 317  ( i will do any ad requests )

[MelancholicMemory 2,027]

Just so you know, "muffin" in the disclaimer is still spelled wrong, as well as the word "responsible." That shouldn't be a problem to fix though.

[Bruno © 125]

 

 

It looks very funny, i liked the idea of the ad, and it looks very good too, I WANT TO USE DURPY MAIL!  

 

To improve this i think that you shoud put a box with a muffin seal in it, so it would show that you used Durpy mail. 

[Shanks 10,816]

I like it, it reminds me of this one youtube video I saw a little while ago which is a hilarious commercial for a Derpy mail service.