DR Leper Lupinstein 410 April 1, 2013 Share April 1, 2013 (edited) I have finally finished my horrorfic for Fluttershy and I call it... Stare. After long hours of typing and editing while listening to extensive tracks of ambient horror, I created a piece that will send your mind to dark dimensions of madness. so go check it out in my blog and tell me what you think about it. Thank you Edited April 1, 2013 by zombronie 1 hXc i ain't like you and i don't wantyour love and i don't need your respect!!!! hXc ^ - BLOOD FOR BLOOD/OUTLAW ANTHEMS Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sir.Flutter Hooves 2,953 April 1, 2013 Share April 1, 2013 I'm always up for a good horrorfic. I'll check it out, if I'm still alive and tell you what I think! Oh, tonight's gonna be filled with fanfic reading! /) 1 This fantastic signature is made my by awesome friend Rainbow Skywalker! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
____ 156 May 5, 2013 Share May 5, 2013 (edited) ____________________ Edited August 10, 2020 by ____ 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DR Leper Lupinstein 410 May 6, 2013 Author Share May 6, 2013 Very, very, VERY good. I loved it. I just have a couple of suggestions for you, -At the beginning, everyone (other than Rarity) talks rather redneck from time to time, see if you can find what I'm mean. -the ending is good, but not your best I'm sure. You either need to extend on the ending (have Fluttershy wake up etc), or change it to something final and dark. Great story, on a whole! well apple jack is the only one who speaks redneck speak. rainbow dash is just being swag cuz she's always gotta be cool. twilight is articulate cuz she's the brain. rarity is just being posh. pinkie is just a hyperactive pony until she's about to die. now fluttershy wasn't going to wake up bcuz she's a tragic hero of the story. basically, because she chose to use her powers for evil, she was to die as her fate for following hatred instead of love. and the reason the ponies came back to kill her is because death can't even break the bonds of friendship thus twilie tells her " where you're going we'll b best friends forever." says it all. hXc i ain't like you and i don't wantyour love and i don't need your respect!!!! hXc ^ - BLOOD FOR BLOOD/OUTLAW ANTHEMS Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
____ 156 May 6, 2013 Share May 6, 2013 (edited) ____________________ Edited August 10, 2020 by ____ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DR Leper Lupinstein 410 May 6, 2013 Author Share May 6, 2013 Very well then, it IS your story to edit, not mine, I still enjoyed it immensely. Keep up the good work, I'll be watching to see if you do. Im thinkin bout doin some more horror fics i gonna make another to Fluttershy where she becomes a Wolfpony (or Lycikkos, according to Twilight) after being bitten. and i might do a dark fantasy horrirfic involving either twilight or trixie delving into black magic. hXc i ain't like you and i don't wantyour love and i don't need your respect!!!! hXc ^ - BLOOD FOR BLOOD/OUTLAW ANTHEMS Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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