Lyrics to Why?

[)O( Scarlet )O( 1,259]

I just wrote these lyrics last night, right before going to sleep. So I was wondering if people could please critic it for me and if someponies could please try putting music to it, singing it and recording it. Here they are, the song is called Why?

 

When I look up at the star lit night sky,

I lie back and think of what could have been.

Your kindness was without peer,

And your inner beauty was the most radiant, I have ever seen

You were the only pony for me,

The only one I held dear.

How I wish, I could, hold you one last time

Without you, I feel like I want to die

 

My heart cries out,

Oh why is life so cruel?

Why were you taken from me?

Why did you have to die?

 

Oh how I wish to have one more chance,

One more chance to tell you,

Tell you how I feel.

 

Celestia called you to fight for the crown,

And you answered the call to arms.

For the good of all Equestria,

You put yourself in the way of harm.

You stood valiantly against the invasion

But the enemy cut you down

How I wish I could, see you, one last time

 

My heart cries out,

Oh why is life so cruel?

Why were you taken from me?

Why did you have to die?

 

Oh how I wish to have one more chance,

One more chance to tell you,

Tell you how I feel.

 

When I see your star up in the sky,

I know you are watching from the heavens,

And I sigh.

I think of how strong our love,

Used to be.

Every time I think of you,

I begin to cry.

And cannot see through the tears,

In my eyes.

 

My heart cries out,

Oh why is life so cruel?

Why were you taken from me?

Why did you have to die?

 

Oh how I wish to have one more chance,

One more chance to tell you,

Tell you how I feel.

 

My heart cries out,

Oh why is life so cruel?

Why were you taken from me?

Why did you have to die?

 

Oh how I wish to have one more chance,

One more chance to tell you,

Tell you how I feel.

[the_jetfighter 94]

i really like the lyrics to thins song, unfortunately im a bass player, not a singer so i cant 100% imagine how it should be sung. but i really hope to hear someone sing this song sometime! im sure it will be fantastic!  

[)O( Scarlet )O( 1,259]

Thanks, I too am a bass player. I could try singing it myself, but my voice is ear bleeding terrible.. So I don't really want to put people through that

[ricardofr-200 24]

I'm now here because it's been almost 2 weeks I didn't came to the forum, and now, you made ​​me want to "test" these lyrics with one (actually my first) of my pony-songs 

 

http://mlpforums.com/topic/66404-ive-got-to-find-a-way-hip-hop-rap-with-bass-instrumental/

 

 

These lyrics are really nice. You done a very good work!