I'll take a look at it for you and see what's up.

well, I have read your story. the only thing I could gather is it needs a bit more detail. I personally think its great.

Well reading the description of the prequel and the squel to the prequel it sounds like the squel has nothing to do with the prequel and in the prequel your just ripping of the mane 6

Edit: And the prequel is incomplete wow that's bad.

this one is new, just giving some back story about Fluttershy and Braeburn, the parents of one of the 'new mane 6' in the other.

Honestly, it just did feel a bit rushed overall. There was a lot more you could have put in the place of detail rather than telling us instead of showing us or just saying "bam bam bam the end."

Also, the ship isn't that common, and it wasn't an amazing story, though I don't think it's as bad as others make it to be.