EasyBreezy

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 Will do Windy

On a cold winter night at 3 am, a baby is heard cooing and crying. The male doctor aka Dr. Horse shouts in excitement “Congratulations, it’s a girl!” The mother didn’t seem enthused at all. Misty Winds says in horror, “WHAT DO YOU MEAN?! YOU SAID IT WAS A BOY! WE EVEN HAD THE ROOM READY FOR HIM I MEAN HER I MEAN IT!” Dr. Horse looked at them in utter confusion as the baby cried and was cradled, sort of. Dr. Horse said “Well if you Don’t want Her then I can ask you would you like me to put her up for adoption. Or, another option you can look at her and accept she is yours and we can forget about this disgust of a Princess Celestia mess. Now what do you have to say?!” Misty winds thought about it and got off the hospital bed and shouted “YOU! WANT ME TO TAKE THIS ABOMINATION OF A CHILD?”  The mare stomped her hooves in anger and in disgust and disbelief she started to pin Dr. Horse down and attack the poor stallion as fast as Nurse Redheart could she called for some staff to help out a stallion, also named Dr. Horse rushed in at a full gallop and yelled: “WHAT IS THE MEANING OF THIS!” The mare was still attacking the poor Stallion in anger until the Stallion pushed Misty winds off and asked Dr. Horse 2 to get restraints and to restrain the angry mare as Dr. Horse 2 trotted out of the scene. He trotted back in 5 minutes later back to the room of where Dr. Horse was and handed restraints to him and as Dr. Horse explained everything and asked Nurse RedHeart to restrain the mother of the child.

Alright, first thing: Remember to keep your story in active voice. Effective fanfics are written like this. https://examples.yourdictionary.com/examples-of-active-and-passive-voice.html

Just be sure to use proper punctuation where needed, and avoid capitalizing unnecessary words. Also, I'd give the second 'Dr. Horse' a different name. Two ponies having the exact same name could be confusing to the reader.