Would My Fanfiction be Understandable?

[AmbientBeat 27]

I've been writing a fanfiction, that is a remake of a comedy-drama MLP fic, named Once in A Lifetime about the ponies coming to our world and having to be rescued from a couple animal smugglers that I wrote in 2012 to cheer myself up after having to move away from California. I finished it after about a year, and I kinda forgot about it until I started watching a show called Skins. I instantly started blueprinting a concept for a web series adaption of my fic, but eventually it just turned into a written fic.

    The remake is in a Skins-ensemble format. The fic is two "seasons" with 7 "episodes" per season. Each episode focuses on one of a small cast of characters from Once, who went through heavy personality changes(their only connection to their Once versions are their names, save for a couple characters). The fic has a very, VERY heavy focus on music(Like every other thing I do). It's even named "Runaway, Houses, City, Clouds", which shares its name with a Tame Impala song. The fic switches between a number of genres, the general ones being Comedy, Drama, Crime, Horror, Action, Teen Drama, and Sitcom. It's going to be rated M for Graphic Sexual References, Strong Violence, Very strong Language Throughout, Heavy Drug Use and Reference, Rude and Unsettling Humor, Frightening Situations, and Upsetting Moments.

     There are 3 main plots to the fic. The one the fic mostly focuses on is Twilight Sparkle getting brutally murdered and wakes up in Seattle rather than preceding to the afterlife. She finds her way to Whidbey Island where she meets a bunch of jaded, hormonal teenagers, and she has no choice but to stay with them and go along with them on their very stupid decisions and awkward mishaps. Eventually, their minds have trouble depicting reality from TV, thanks to Twilight's presence, and they start going through unsettling hallucinations. Along with that they have to keep her from a sociopath who wants to sell Twilight on the Black Market to impress his very wealthy government father.

     The second plot is an 18 year old reporter named Teresa(not from the original fic) who is investigating a series of deaths and murders that show no cause of death, starting on Twilight's arrival(an event she doesnt know about). Eventually she learns about a species that come from another level of existence that are invisible and completely silent and can warp reality and hide in light, and are VERY angry, which leads to Teresa finding out that that means our "fourth wall" is broken, preventing anybody anywhere from going to the afterlife, so she has to find a way to fix it. That plot basically answers any questions the main plot brings up.

     The third plot is a very minor one, used to add some crime flavor to the fic, about a motherload of drugs, that all the characters seem to fight for, along with a number of criminals.

    Runaway is influenced by a number of movies, shows, books, and songs, most notably Skins, Trainspotting, Pulp Fiction, Life on Mars, Ashes to Ashes, and whatever song plays on my ipod. A big thing about the fic is that it is actually about the teens' character development. Runaway also uses MLP fanfic cliches for comedy. Every character eventually finds out theyre in that fanfic scenario, so they use that to their advantage(and often comes back to bite them).

    Since there's a lot going on here, I need to know if it would be a readable story instead of a confusing mess.

[Nervous Stitch 813]

Hey @AmbientBeat,

 

 

Since you're looking for some help on your project instead of just showing it off, I moved your topic to Creative Resources. 

[Rosetta 18]

I think it would be readable if the reader put effort into understanding it and concentrated on the story rather than skimming. It sounds like a very interested fanfiction as that - but I don't know if I, personally, would read it. M-rated fics aren't really my cup of tea, but the plot is intriguing, so I might read the first few chapters and see what happens from there.