My New OC

[Mr.Brony 570]

this is my new oc i did it took me 3 hours to get it done. i used a new drawing stily on it. so let my know what you think of it. and i don't have a name for him im not good at coming up with names if you have a name for him let me know

[Shiki 5,855]

You really do have skill with this kind of artwork. It's impressive.

 

It's so impressive that I'm going to have to raise my standards and act like a critic who is never pleased about anything.

 

I'm going to have to say that the wings are pretty... "off." Compared to the rest of the pony, they are too detailed, and because of this, more attention goes towards the wings, yet at the same time, making me want to veer away and look at the smoothness of the mane and tail. The wings, mane, and tail are all drawn perfectly, but they do not blend together very well. What would make it better would be either simplifying the wings' drawing pattern, or add more detail to both the mane and tail. Also, if you were to go with the more detail path, you would have to add just a few more little details every now and then on the coat.

 

But, pulling away from the Debby Downer side of me, the tail, mane, and pose all compliment each other very nicely. The tail swirled around the back leg is just pleasant to look at, and the mane... just the way it falls looks very nice. Overall, this is a great drawing. 9.9/10. The only reason it's not a 10/10 is for the reasoning I said before.

[Smokey the mudkip 52]

that is magnificent! The wings are so fabulous, and i just adore the mane and tail. You did a wonderful job on the shading, well done!

[Motion Spark 7,807]

@, and you couldn't have said it better, actually Kawaii just stole my words.

 

I'll add more to the critique. Note that I alredy think that you're drawing is perfect, but I'm going to get very picky with you, because I know you ridiculously good. Both of his fore hooves looks off, specially the right one. actually I just try to see it without the mane, and you trace imaginary lines in you head, you kind of notice that the right hoof was drawn almost resembling a human arm, it doesn't look much like a horso leg.

Now, still imagining that he's bald. the torso is much more off, because his belly is too up, seeing that, the imaginary line of his chest wouldn't make sense if the mane wasn't covering it.

 

This is all my critique, this is a great piece by itself, but I just said that because I wan't you to get better and better and I can't come up with a name, I am bad for names too.

[OkBuddy 586]

I...I'm speechless. This is one excellent talent you have. I especially love the wings. I also like how the drawing is very neat. But for some reason this OC reminds me of a dark angel or something like that.

[Crombie 32]

Since everyone else is critiquing, I feel I should do the same.

 

First off, feathers don't work that way. They work in "layers" so to say. Depending on the level of detail as well as the size of the animal, you should only have about 2-4 layers of them, however they will be fairly bunched up within their layer. They also sprawl outward and become much larger the further down you go on the layers. (The bunching up tends to happen around the much more fleshy part of the wing.)

Here's a reference for what I'm getting at (It's really basic but it should aid my point.): http://hippie.nu/~unicorn/tut/img/basics/animalanatomy/wing-feathers.jpeg

 

Secondly, you do seem to take your art fairly seriously. If you plan on continuing traditionally, I'd recommend a scanner (One that can get at least 600ppi). Most cheap ones cost about $30 at Wal-Mart, now-a-days, so don't worry too much about price. Though if you want to try your hands at digital I'd say start off with a cheap tablet, like one of the Capture, Connect, or Create. (Just fair warning, they don't have a built in monitor system, and the sensitivity is about half as strong as an Intinous, but it's for beginners. IMO) I'd also recommend some software, like SAI or Photoshop CS5 or higher.

 

Third, your grasp on volume needs a little work, not much, but a lot of the parts feel discontinued and disconnected. Don't worry about simplifying things if it makes more sense to what people are viewing. (Don't start stacking on details until you have all the volume, proportions, and form exactly like you want it, or it's just gonna be a mess.)

 

Fourth, I can't seem to determine a light source. The shadows underneath him indicate the it's above, but the shading on the tail and neck say there's a light source to his left, which would mean his wing would be blocking a lot of light on his body and face.

 

Fifth, the anatomy doesn't connect up very well, but I already semi-hinted at that during the part about volume, so I'm not gonna go on about it. You don't have a huge problem on the placement of the limbs, mostly it's that they're detach from one another.

 

Finally, you're not bad, but you gotta lot to learn. I would recommend you keep trying and studying. You'll get there.

[Planty 1,053]

The other critiques in this thread are perfect and i agree with them so i won't do a repost of them , This is an almost flawless picture it's very very well done!

 

I tried coming up with a name:

 

Xiu De Vau

 

(mainly because it sound's cool but i can tie it in:)

 

Xiu (i thought originally was a name of a Chinese god from some really old religion but i can't find that anymore) is now day's just used as an awesome name in America and China (apparently, thought I've never herd it) but it sound's awesome none the less

 

Vau is a letter (vav) in some old languages (Hebrew being one) that no longer exists in today's alphabet. This represents this OC's myth in the pony realm and no one is sure that he exists all they know is how grand he is.

 

De: I feel it just fit's nicely

[Mr.Brony 570]

let you guys know i didn't put much time into it. now if i spend a few days on it or a week it would look 10x better. so that all i have to say to your replys. no hard fillings.

[Nac0n 105]

I suggest that you get a scanner, increases the quality a whole lot : )

 

I really like the shading but i'm not very fond of realistic styled ponies... So i will rest my critics D:

[Dario Modugno 10]

Mhhh though one.

 

This is an OC, and OC's are know for their simplicity (well not always lol), Crombie's critics were kind of true, but that's not a valid point, because we don't know for sure what were you aiming at.

 

I'm going to assume that you were aiming for a realistic style, if that's the case, the only little thing might be the "light management", other than that, it's pretty much perfect. really.

Remember that no one can see the drawing like yu do until you become a master of it, sadly people often see errors or stuff like that when we actually wanted for our drawing to "look like that". XD