RAGESTAR 479 July 30, 2013 Share July 30, 2013 I'm making a pokemon rp ooc, so far the story and requirements are fine, but before I can post it, I need somone to correct my grammer mistakes because I'm too busy with other problems. I know this seems really lazy, but I just don't have the time to sit down and go through it myself, so please don't hate. P.S. this rp isn't for this forum, its for a different one. P.P.S. BROHOOFS FOR ANYONE WHO HELPS! A news woman is standing patiently in a field while being filmed, "This is breaking news from pokemon world news network. after a series of storms raveged the surrounding area for days, out of nowhere a huge, mysterious mass of land has appeared over the kanto region, after many failed attempts to reach this strange island due to the large thunderstorms surrounding it, we had thought that we would never know what it was, but today a mysterious video has arrived through unkown means to our news station, here is the un-cut and shocking footage of the mysterious inhabitant of the island, the man known only as void, who started a humanity hating cult a few years back, what words does this madman have to say? Let's find out!" A man in a black cloak and grey mask, sits behind a desk, "Greetings people of the world......my name, is void.....and with the help of my many loyal followrrs, I have risen this ancient island for the sole purpose of hosting a tournament......the worlds greatest...and LAST tournament.....for you see.....this island was once meant to host battles for legedary pokemon, and after a little tinkering with its ancient technology, i have turned it into the worlds most powerful bomb......so....if some one doesnt win this tournament within within a weeks time, then i will detonate this bomb and take half of the living creatures of this world with it. if I find more than the ten trainers I requested on this island....even one....I will detonate the bomb......now....for those of you watching who happen to be pokemon trainers....listen closely, I am inviting ten and ONLY ten of the worlds best trainers to compete in this great contest.....if you win, you will gain wealth and power, beyond your wildest dreams.....if I defeat the final contestant......then I will detonate this island immeadeatly......some of you may be wondering.....why I would I do such a horrible thing....its becouse....you are all weak....every human on this planet even with their precious pokemon, they are.....YOU are too weak and pathetic to deserve living. alas....I too am human....but that just means I must cleans this world even more.....if I destroy half this world, then that should suffice for enough of a lesson to show you.....just how much humanity and pokemon alike.....are evil." The screen is back to the camera woman but she just stands in place with a shocked and frightened look, "s-stop the camera.....we have to run...we have to run now!" Said the camera woman before running off camera, followed by the camera dropping and the sound of frightened panting from the camera man himself, the screen then turns to the "technical difficulties" screen. At that moment, in a hotel in kanto, a pokemon trainer named ace steel had just finished watching the broadcast. Ace cursed as he saw the broadcast, he had been sitting in his hotel room when the news came on, he was now on his feet, "WHAT THE HELL!? IS THIS SOME KIND OF DAMN JOKE!? Tch, if that asshole thinks he can threaten that and get away with it, then he's crazier than I thought! Let's go rebel, were gonna kick his ass!" Said ace bravely before quickly grabbing his backpack and running to the door he then stopped and looked back impatiently at his aggron, "are you coming or what?" Asked ace with a wry grin, rebel merely looked at ace and grunted in acnoledgement, before standing up and quickly following his beloved trainer out the hotel door. Roster: 1:Ace steel 2: 3: 4: 5: 6: 7: 8: 9: 10: Rules: 1: NO GODMODDING 2: NO MARY SUES/GARY STUES 3: NO LEGENDARY POKEMON 4: ONLY THREE POKEMON MAY BE USED Sign-ups/character bio below please. Name: Age: Appearence: Personality: History: Pokemon: Reasons for entering the tournament: My main OC: http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/crimson-grinn-r3232 My EQW OC: http://mlpforums.com/page/eqw-characters/_/approved/crimson-clash-r12 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Acoustic Cloud 2,202 July 30, 2013 Share July 30, 2013 Step one, fix your title. You need to change "Grammer" to "Grammar".So that is the first step to fixing your errors. (I'm short on time, so I can't.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PlunderSteed 1,252 July 30, 2013 Share July 30, 2013 You mean your grammar mistakes? Incidentally, if you are afraid you don't have enough time to proof-read your own work, how do you expect to have time to do the RP project any justice? 1 Regards, PlunderSteed Bassist, pianist, and backing vocalist for MLP-themed metal band Draconequus. Check out our latest music video, a metal cover of "Tricks up my Sleeve" here. Bassist, pianist, and vocalist for MLP-themed alt rock band Worst Princess. Check our recent live performance of "Shine Like Rainbows" here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RAGESTAR 479 July 30, 2013 Author Share July 30, 2013 Because I'm planning on starting it when I have more free time in a few days, but I wanted to use that time to start the rp, not correcting my grammar. My main OC: http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/crimson-grinn-r3232 My EQW OC: http://mlpforums.com/page/eqw-characters/_/approved/crimson-clash-r12 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezio Auditore 702 July 30, 2013 Share July 30, 2013 (edited) A news woman is standing patiently in a field while being filmed, "This is breaking news from Pokemon World News Network, after a series of storms ravaged the surrounding area for days, out of nowhere a huge, mysterious mass of land has appeared over the kanto region. After many failed attempts to reach this strange island due to the large thunderstorms surrounding it, we had thought that we would never know what it was, but today a mysterious video has arrived through unknown means to our news station, here is the uncut and shocking footage of the mysterious inhabitant of the island, the man known only as void, who started a humanity hating cult a few years back, what words does this madman have to say? Let's find out!" A man in a black cloak, and grey mask, sits behind a desk, "Greetings people of the world......my name, is void.....and with the help of my many loyal followers I have risen this ancient island for the sole purpose of hosting a tournament......the worlds greatest...and LAST tournament." "For you see.....this island was once meant to host battles for legendary pokemon, and after a little tinkering with its ancient technology, I have turned it into the worlds most powerful bomb......so....if someone doesn't win this tournament within within a weeks time, then I will detonate this bomb and take half of the living creatures of this world with it." "If I find more than the ten trainers I requested on this island....even one....I will detonate the bomb." "Now....for those of you watching who happen to be pokemon trainers....listen closely, I am inviting ten, and ONLY ten of the worlds best trainers to compete in this great contest. If you win, you will gain wealth and power beyond your wildest dreams. If I defeat the final contestant......then I will detonate this island immediately .....some of you may be wondering.....why I would I do such a horrible thing....its because ...you are all weak....every human on this planet even with their precious pokemon, they are.....YOU are too weak and pathetic to deserve life."Alas....I too am human....but that just means I must cleans this world even more.....if I destroy half this world, then that should suffice for enough of a lesson to show you.....just how much humanity and pokemon alike.....are evil." The screen is back to the camera woman but she just stands in place with a shocked and frightened look. "S-stop the camera, we have to run, we have to run now!" Said the camera woman before running off camera, followed by the camera dropping and the sound of frightened panting from the camera man himself, the screen then turns to the "technical difficulties" screen.At that moment, in a hotel in kanto, a pokemon trainer named Ace Steel had just finished watching the broadcast. Ace cursed as he saw the broadcast, he had been sitting in his hotel room when the news came on, he was now on his feet. "WHAT THE HELL!? IS THIS SOME KIND OF DAMN JOKE!?" "Tch, if that asshole thinks he can threaten that and get away with it, then he's crazier than I thought! Let's go rebel, were gonna kick his ass!" Said ace bravely before quickly grabbing his backpack and running to the door he then stopped and looked back impatiently at his aggron, "are you coming or what?" Asked ace with a wry grin, rebel merely looked at ace and grunted in acknowledgement, before standing up and quickly following his beloved trainer out the hotel door. I corrected everything I saw wrong, and mixed up the spacing a bit to convey a bit more drama, enjoy. Edited July 31, 2013 by Ezio Auditore Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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