ooc (ooc) the quest for the golden key

[thatonepony12 88]

princess celastia is hiring sevreal ponys to go ona quest for a key in the far reaches in equestria

im going to need about 7 ocs they have to have some sort of combat skill also if you think you can imorove apon on my story plz do tell me

[SilencedBrony123 11]

princess celastia is hiring sevreal ponys to go ona quest for a key in the far reaches in equestria

im going to need about 7 ocs they have to have some sort of combat skill also if you think you can imorove apon on my story plz do tell me

Hello there, I am trained in many combat syles: I can fight with my wings, My hooves and just about any weapon. Just be careful where you fire a gun because I am prone to everlasting fits of bloodlust, if manipulated correctly this can be VERY helpful in battle. Plus this bloodlust can only be cured by Hearts Desire. (seen in season 1 of MLP FIM)

 

Link to my OC: http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/bloodshot-flash-r7584

[Bojo 1,404]

Freeze Frame is not that used to battle yet he doesn't suck at it, and he is very good at making special effects for his movies so he could adapt them to make visual trickery to fool his enemies. Tell me what you think!

 

OC: http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/freeze-frame-r7594

[SilencedBrony123 11]

princess celastia is hiring sevreal ponys to go ona quest for a key in the far reaches in equestria

im going to need about 7 ocs they have to have some sort of combat skill also if you think you can imorove apon on my story plz do tell me

You could improve the story like this.

 

A dark force rises in Equestria. A force that we all thought had long been defeated. Princess Celestia needs seven brave OC's to travel to the farthest reaches of Equestria to retrieve a mystical key. But be warned, this is a dangerous enemy and any who cannot fight well will not survive.

 

How's that?

[thatonepony12 88]

thats goood better then what had